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Burnt Offerings
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Burnt Offerings |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
All that I have has been offered to you My body lifted up, presented to you Sacrifices, none too great to perform My offerings, in this way, will not harm Wrap myself in robes of white shimmering Underneath star filled sky glimmering Wreaths of holly planted upon my head To remain after robes of white I shed Bleeding sweat for every drop that I bled And standing grey as stone with arms outspread Encircled before flames consume me whole Transfixed, sacrificed to a higher goal I come and lay my body down by you For salvation, nothing I would not do |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
....................(wow).................... this is amazing  SEA |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Thank you SEA, this comes from a place where I don't like to be, but produces this kind of poetry. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
All that I have has been offered to you My body lifted up, presented to you Sacrifices, none too great to perform My offerings, in this way, will not harm Wrap myself in robes of white shimmering Underneath star filled sky glimmering Wreaths of holly planted upon my head To remain after robes of white I shed Bleeding sweat for every drop that I bled And standing grey as stone with arms outspread Encircled before flames consume me whole Transfixed, sacrificed to a higher goal I come and lay my body down by you For salvation, nothing I would not do =================================== Once again I cant single out lines... they are all so awesome they stand as one... the vocab, phrases, and cadence are perfection the imagery in this is just so poetically impressive ... the imagery is just so damn COOL!! as is the level of intensity and depth of the sensuality and express of the emotions. This is one of your best in my humble opinion.(biased me?) naaa *L* Now excuse me while I go build you that alter.  very very cool write PK. oh you speak to me in riddles |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
really cool read |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I remember this from WAY back...back when ya had initials! Loved the whole poem, but the title in particular gave me a bit of a smile, because..grin...I thought "Burnt Offerings" would make an excellent title for a collection of MY work...heh heh... awesome as ever, PK...(were those initials???)  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You might not like going to the place that generates thoughts such as these, but it is a tremendously powerful read....thank you... |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Very original writing. I enjoyed this much. All writing comes |
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