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Open Poetry #13

A game of Marbles

JamesBowie
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since 2000-11-25

Posts 252
big old Bangor Maine up by the shack

0 posted 2001-03-27 11:40 PM

I can feel the marbles
slipping through my fingers
little glass reminders
of what I am losing
The problem is
this is not a game
and only now do I realize
I never knew how to play

A real man

kisses his children goodnight

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

1 posted 2001-03-27 11:52 PM

JamesB~
It is SO good to see you back 'home'.

I pray you are well and that your muse will gift us with more of these wonderful pieces.
*Hugs*

Lost a marble or two of my own, my friend.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
[email protected]

Meadowmuse
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since 1999-12-27

Posts 3263

2 posted 2001-03-28 09:33 PM

Hello, James. This is a clever handling of a metaphorical theme, to be sure. Brief, strong, well-lined. A striking last line. Thanks for it.

Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau

Songbird
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since 1999-12-15

Posts 2184
Missouri

3 posted 2001-03-28 11:12 PM

I like this it is short and consise and to the point, and the use of the game of marbles is one that is easily related too. It is a good use of metaphore. Enjoyed it very much.

SEA

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since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

4 posted 2001-03-28 11:17 PM

James~ this is such a great poem....these lines hit home for me

                    "and only now do I realize
                    I never knew how to play"

excellent writing

SEA

JamesBowie
Member

since 2000-11-25

Posts 252
big old Bangor Maine up by the shack

5 posted 2001-03-29 07:05 AM

thanks guys, I keep it short cuz big words confuse me

Nan

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since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

6 posted 2001-03-29 09:19 PM

Confusion reigns, James...

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