Open Poetry #13 |
Brick Wall |
monique Member
since 2000-02-03
Posts 369Louisiana |
In jail you have a long trail Ahead of you hoping to get on the train Of miracle from God above Wishing for His love To give you one more chance At life where you can dance The perfect step of a gentleman And you can't wait when It will happen Out of the playpen You will fend for yourself Never going back on the shelf Like a book waiting to be read Coming alive eating your bread A free man |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Monique~ I know there's a mother's heart inside this one. *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
I love this, so much heart put in to it... ~Tier |
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Mabel A. Dilley Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 859Seattle, WA, USA |
Highly descriptive. Poetically written. "I am not now that which I have been." |
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monique Member
since 2000-02-03
Posts 369Louisiana |
Thank You Marge, Tier and Julian Quite a few of my son's friends are spending time in jail i knew them when they were younger and it is hard for me to see them in there and at the end of the month i will find out if my own son will end in the slammer. I do realize it is for their good because they do not seem to want to change their ways of dangerous behavior, driving drunk. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This is a beautiful but heart wrenching poem...and being from La. I know just how common it (Drunk driving) is (and no people, I don't have a license) I don't know what the solution is, we live in this culture that literally GIVES AWAY booze and charges DOUBLE for water--I have often looked around at the many festivals and thought, "now how do they expect all of these people to get home?" Designated driver WILL work, if ya can find someone willing to be designated. I could go on about this forever, as ya can see, but I'll just close that I loved this thought provoking piece and my prayers are with you and your loved ones. |
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monique Member
since 2000-02-03
Posts 369Louisiana |
yeppi di yep Serenity you got that right about the festival and thought |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
lot of emotion in th is one...... Kathleen Blake |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Sweetie, You have alot of feelings raped up in this one, I know because my son not only has done the same and is waiting for judgement but has taken the road of drugs and right now I am at a loss as to what do to, I send you my love and prayers, Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. |
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monique Member
since 2000-02-03
Posts 369Louisiana |
Thank You so much Cerenity I'll do the same for you, praying And the worst part he cannot drive for one year, so i have to drive him to work everyday i feel like i am back at nursing a child again, you know those midnight feeding. monique |
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