Open Poetry #13 |
PASSIONATE POETS! Gimme Some Feed Back! |
wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
Say, please do you get it I am hungry right now You gave more to the chickens The pigs and the cow Gimme some feed back Quit saying nice stuff Just strap on the bag Being hungry is rough You gave me some wheat Barley and grain Then you took it away And I’m goin’ insane Gimme some feed back Sugar cube or some oat Don’t tell me I’m shiny And have a nice coat Gimme some feedback Don’t gimme no carrot I’m a horse and a poet Your praise I can bare it We’ll be best of friends We'll go to the track But you’re being a hog Gimme some feed back [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 05-05-2001).] |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Good poem. |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
Walt, You sound more like a donkey - braying for more. Good luck at the track. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
the chickens, pigs and cows provided eggs, bacon and milk...a complete breakfast... what meal you offerin'? |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Cute, Walt! You and the poem. |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
You've got it Walt! Feed back, Feed back, Feed back, Feed back, Feed back, Feed back, Feed back, Feed back, Feed back, Feed back, Feed back, Feed back, Feed back, Feed back, Feed back, Feed back, Feed back, Feed back, Feed back, Feed back, Feed back, Feed back, Feed back, Feed back ... I always enjoy your words, and this is no exception! Thanks for the smiles .. Best wishes, /Kit [This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 05-05-2001).] |
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forevernbluejeans Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 76 |
Praise is food to a poets heart |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
Feedback you'll get. Well said and message received! This is Great walt! ~Sheri |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
ROTF sick of being told you're great are we? Remember what I said about cropping? Maybe you could put this into a haiku ... hehehehe K |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
I heart ya, Walt, loud and clear getting feedback's awfully dear be it praise or be it jeer at least one knows one's read. Enjoyed your poem here, clever way of making your point. So many poets to read and only so much time or stamina, but we keep hangin' in there, don't we? |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Walt, you said it! Nice and clearly.. Now strap on the feed-bag.... Sandra |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
i ate at the feed bag once its delish... [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 05-06-2001).] |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
You are so silly....but so cool at the same time |
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cruz Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 282Dallas,Texas USA |
?is it or is it not fun to play with people's heads? the title is pretty neat. this one made me laugh all tha way through. very brainy "Please, do you get it?" |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
ROFL Thanks for the chuckles, Walt! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
ROFL @ Balladeer's response... but I'll try to get into the spirit of things! LOL Awwwww, wow... poor baby... has someone been withholding your poetic sustenance??? A feedbackless diet is pretty tough, isn't it? *G* An excellent rant you've written, walt... big smiles here... and a hearty pat on the back to you! *G* [This message has been edited by suthern (edited 05-09-2001).] |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
hee hee hee yuh yuh whinny |
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