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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada 
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Remnants of the Past Sweet heavens, please let loose my heart, Remove the pain I wish to part; I beg you for a moment's peace, And pray that I may find release. 'Twas oh so very long ago, And yet, the mem'ries overflow; They dwell within the depths of me, Surrounding all I've come to be. 'Tis often that I reminisce, Return to all that I have missed; But low, the cries within remain, To drown in sorrow's sweet refrain. Entombed in time, I live the past, And question that which did not last; I ask you for one final time, Remove the casement of my mind. Take hold the remnants pondered there, Transform the thoughts that I despair; Make whole my life, that I might see … The beauty in reality. /Kit McCallum [This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 05-04-2001).] |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
And question that which did not last...love this! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Kit this is so eerie....so similar to one I was about to post, that I deleted mine--lol--You said it so much better! Great theme!  |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
Sometimes we must see the past for what it is, past. Loved these lines, The beauty in reality." |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
~JLR: Thanks so much JLR ... I'm glad you enjoyed this one!  ~Serenity: Thank you for these lovely words Serenity .... but pleeeeease don't delay posting something because we're on the same wavelength, it's bound to happen once in a while around this Poetry Land ... I'd love to read it, I really enjoy your writing! ~Inot2b: You've captured my thoughts perfectly Inot2b ... now if it were only an easy task, sigh ... thank you for the sentiments! Much appreciation to you both, /Kit [This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 05-04-2001).] |
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Dennis Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 235Indiana |
I really related to this...the past is sometimes hard to get away from |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"The beauty in reality." I believe we all need a fresh dose of this...James |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
'Tis often that I reminisce, Return to all that I have missed; But low, the cries within remain, To drown in sorrow's sweet refrain. Entombed in time, I live the past, And question that which did not last; I ask you for one final time, Remove the casement of my mind. Take hold the remnants pondered there, Transform the thoughts that I despair; Make whole my life, that I might see … The beauty in reality =================== I love this bittersweet softly melancholy write Kit... the vocab and language is poetic perfection to emote the ache and pleading quality this has. but the cadence just simply steals the show here... what a rhyme divine pleasure when read aloud this is. beautiful me girlie...  me |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
When I reply after Janet...all I feel like saying is what she said...so, ditto. (oh, and my feeling about memories, even sad ones, is that they are reminders of lessons learned or that need to be learned) |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Kit, pain runs very deep sometimes and scars where er it runs but beauty flows past channels deep and on to shallows in the sun Krawdad |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
A prayer I could easily echo... but never so poetically. *S* Well done! |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Loved this one, the question is If you could erase those memorys would you, or good or bad does the past define who we are ( one for philosophy 101 maybe) Wonderful write I enjoyed the words and the thoughts. Regards, Olias. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Kit, wse simply have to accept the past for what it is and not over-analyze that which can not be understood.I think there is a master plan somewhere...whatever the past was, it brought us to where we are today so maybe that was the idea all along....I'm glad events of your past have brought you to us... |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
This is wonderful....and wrapped neatly into your poem is a good lesson on life...sigh. One I wish I could learn. Thanks Kit.  |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This is so well written, in perfect form, and a subject that touches us all Superb, my friend Liz |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
An age old problem Kit, as I am also a member of your club of "can't get over it!" Very well written as usual, and always a lesson to be learned within. ~*~ I write ~ Therefore I am ~*~ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Most superb writing, Kit, my friend... Regards, sudhir |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
It would seem my reply has got itself lost so I'll try again. Fabulous! I love this, simply one of the best! "Friends are quiet angels who lift us to our |
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