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Robulus
Junior Member
since 2001-05-01
Posts 11


0 posted 2001-05-02 07:06 AM


The Whirlwind
by Robin Spiteri.

Inside lies a void unbroken and pure
unsullied by man but empty, unsure
it's passions untested, it's limits unknown
and so breaks the dawn, a whirlwind is sown.

This untested power straining it's will,
a series of tests to challenge it's skill.
Yet no effort so wasted, no judgement so true,
as to maintain that this power lies in each one of you.

Look to your heart and search for this void,
'less the dust of the world builds too deep up inside,
the path to yourself is to constantly roam
so your dawn never dies, your whirlwind unknown.



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Robulus
Junior Member
since 2001-05-01
Posts 11

1 posted 2001-05-02 07:53 AM


Does anybody know how to change those settings so that I invite comments?
Irish Rose
Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263

2 posted 2001-05-02 08:36 AM


you got my comment, this is very moving.  The replies just come and they will,
Welcome to Passions.

[This message has been edited by Irish Rose (edited 05-02-2001).]

Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

3 posted 2001-05-02 09:44 AM


Look to your heart and search for this void,
'less the dust of the world builds too deep up inside,
the path to yourself is to constantly roam
so your dawn never dies, your whirlwind unknown.
==============

this is excellent poetry..
written with depth and soul
well done employ of imagery and metaphor,
as well as poetic phrasing.
and the empowering message is noted.
Welcome to Poetry Land Robin...nice to meet you.
I look forward to reading more of your work.
jm

I miss you so much I cant stand it
Seems like my heart is breaking in two
My head says no, but my soul demands it
Everything I do reminds me of you

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