Open Poetry #13 |
Haiku....farm land |
Joe Houck Member
since 2001-04-23
Posts 324california |
Farm land, life giver When the cold rears ugly head It will get frost bit. Joe Houck 04/30/01 |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
Nice piece! To Passions |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Hi sweetie....what a great haiku... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
JoeHouck~ Very nicely done. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Welcome to Passions....this is lovely...be well... Greeneyes~
*** "Within you I lose myself |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Joe, welcome to Pipps, and I sure enjoyed your entrance. I will be flying by often to read your work, and have fun here that is the main thing! Please visit me at my new homepage: |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Quite a powerful image here with a touch of humor, I enjoyed the read and WELCOME!!! |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Well well well...welcome again heh... feedback good or bad you say... ok then..to me this feels slightly stilted..forced into the syllable count... it's the middle line that does it: When the cold rears ugly head the its that is missing between rears and ugly is noticeable... hmmm how about: Farm land, life giver The cold rears its ugly head And earth is frost bit. or some such thing to introduce the flow a bit more? K All obscurity starts with a danger: Your dangers are many. I Cannot look much but your form suffers Some strange injury Sylvia Plath [This message has been edited by Severn (edited 05-01-2001).] |
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