Open Poetry #13 |
Saline |
Sunshine
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Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
SALINE two valleys lie side by side…where wild deer still roam and hide two rivers, where they verge…Smoky, Saline, run to merge this is where I live and breathe…this is why I shall not leave for I’m drawn by the Smoky’s haze…o’er which I often gaze in the middle of this great land…I’ve come to watch, quietly stand mid the valleys of great tall grass…where Indian spirits have not passed where cornflowers are blue as sky…meets turkey foot grown on high as meadowlarks cheer my roam…this I deem my native home LA born but small town bred…never knew where belonged my bed that sense one has to find her own…led me here, no more to roam to touch the ground, feel the warm…to search the sky, know no harm to breath the air, pulled in deep…to sort my thoughts, which to keep where gold rustles ‘neath the sun…where bodies work till all is done where one is braced by Kansas air…leathered people still stop to care where cottonwood by river’s bank…gives one shade to give God thanks as short blue meets tall blue come green…a feeling, a sense, all is serene two rivers, where they verge…Smoky, Saline, run to merge fill their banks, then flow on more…follow their way to Missouri’s shore pass me by, I place leaf’s ship…that shall flow on to Mississip and on that ship, in sunlight’s gleam…shall forge on, a forgotten dream… |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ Stunningly lovely read. The graphic is breathtaking ! Serene thoughts meandering here. I enjoyed this one and will be back to read again. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
You've painted a beautiful picture in my mind. Excellent! [This message has been edited by walker (edited 04-28-2001).] |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Dear lady...that was simply the most artistic marriage of art and poetry I have read in a long time. The flower almost looked like a river, where they verge (did you notice that?)hmmm bet you did! The images were so beautiful I could almost smell the flowers. No pressure here, I am growing to expect nothing less. Please visit me at my new homepage: |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I am pleasantly surprised as I sit here in bed reading these beautiful poems! I thought this was one about contac lenses! How wonderful to see this!!!!! Kathleen Blake |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
Very beautiful picture that you have painted. I really enjoyed the read |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
This is a lovely poem. I was raised on the prairies. Joyce |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
two rivers, where they verge…Smoky, Saline, run to merge fill their banks, then flow on more…follow their way to Missouri’s shore pass me by, I place leaf’s ship…that shall flow on to Mississip and on that ship, in sunlight’s gleam…shall forge on, a forgotten dream… =================================== See me here on Missouri's shore ... water flows of legend and lore I shall wait for leafs drift ... downstream I will receive thy poetic gift. Two poets souls touch in time ... brought together by love of rhyme. (you KNOW your format and inner line rhyme made me giddy..right) Though my soul may sit in darkness, |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Sunshine - this could only have been written by you, that special poet called Sunshine. I love it. BC |
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Amuse_mi Member
since 2001-04-22
Posts 110 |
Absolutely real. I went there and I needed a change! |
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latin passion Senior Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 576 |
From the heartland of midwest, and native acendants. You painted a beautiful picture for those to see. LP |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari dear heart, utterly spellbindingly beautiful, always you write so visually. I never ever fail to be moved and transported by you dear heart. Truly outstanding love Take care love as always Puck Take back the hope you gave,- I claim |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wonderful Karilea! Lovely rhyme scheme and flow, and so very descriptive ... I feel as if you've taken me there to see this all first-hand. A beautiful journey, thank you! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
oh my.....this one is stunning...loved the imagery....love it all. Make me wish to be there. ((hugs)) Charisma |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
This - I will reread = and reread again - (but I do that with many of yours) still this is extra special |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Wow, you transport me and give me a vista of beauty and the serenity that goes with it, your so giving, Thank you. Regards, Olias. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
beautiful discription and the flow itself explained it all..WOW!...this is such an amazing piece..this is pure beauty thru words..i really liked it..enjoyed much by me thanks for sharing ...? if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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