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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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any other one you'd choose I could understand-- but this one is unhealing bruise this one is the back of hand. Any other fantasy I would draw her perfectly I'd wrap her in some silvered bow and on a string, I'd let her float... anything, you'd want, I'd give, everything I would forgive, I'd fill a box of pox of me, and burn before I'd give to thee-- to burn and die in effigy, in eagerness to live. |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
I'm trying, but . . . ? I'll come back . . . |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
any other one you'd choose I could understand-- but this one is unhealing bruise this one is the back of hand. Any other fantasy I would draw her perfectly I'd wrap her in some silvered bow and on a string, I'd let her float... anything, you'd want, I'd give, everything I would forgive, I'd fill a box of pox of me, and burn before I'd give to thee-- to burn and die in effigy, in eagerness to live. ==================================== every line baby... every last word... feel it deep ... and understand the rhymes weep. this is so sad and so beautiful sen .... and ya know what this moth is learning... sometimes in the self sacrifice... we give too much of ourself away... and then? ... whats left to give? why ask why baby...it aint easy being a moth (need that tatooed on me keester)  hugs me twin  meThough my soul may sit in darkness, |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
if any but that one. . . *sigh*. . . the sacrifices that we make. . . sadness here. . . ---------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I read it and re-read it, this is so special, the punctuation is flawless I believe, the wording is flowing, and the ending is not to be forgotten. Kathleen Blake |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Somebody chose wrong? It happens every day. good poem. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Serenity, Well that said it all. *L* |
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