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snowpants
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0 posted 2001-04-21 10:22 PM




there really is no reason for this separation;
all I’ve ever required is in your breathing...
every word you say brings me the lightest elation;
I’ve found being close to you is all I’m needing...

the mountains always keep their distance,
but remain close enough for our viewing...
the dance of the stars provides the mood for romance,
the simple touch of your hand will cause my undoing...

so, why aren’t we together in this wondrous setting?
the serene waves of the sea lure us close to love...
my precious one, the empty space beside me is quite unsettling--
being here without you is simply unheard of...

take me away to where you are right now;
I can’t be without the comfort of your air...
this day, I am ready to give my heart with a vow
because another night of this distance I surely cannot bear.

-kh 04/21/01

to be with you...
I've tried to hide my passion,
but it's just no use...
piece by piece I lose it
when you walk into the room...

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1 posted 2001-04-21 10:25 PM


This is quite lovely, snowpants...but then, I've always admired your works...
Tessa
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2 posted 2001-04-21 10:30 PM


This tugs at the heartstrings.  Very nicely done!  
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3 posted 2001-04-21 10:39 PM


So beautiful....and yes, tugs hard at the heart    SEA
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4 posted 2001-04-22 12:33 PM


there really is no reason for this separation;
all I’ve ever required is in your breathing...
every word you say brings me the lightest elation;
I’ve found being close to you is all I’m needing...
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why ask why .. the answer usually isnt the one we want to hear ...
but then Im not known for my optimism    
and HEY ... SP rhymed again... wayyyy cooool  
rhyme kissed imagery ...
love that pic...
another beauty from your groovy pen.
well done poetess frostypants   lol

I love your imperfections ... I love your everything ...
Your broken heart ... your broken wings.


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5 posted 2001-04-22 02:03 AM


excellent sp. . . I really love this one. . .



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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Bill Charles
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6 posted 2001-04-22 04:22 PM


Snowpants - lovely poem from the heart, lovely mountains from so far to cross. Why, I wonder, does the best have to always seem to be so far.

BC

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7 posted 2001-04-22 04:26 PM


Lovely poem.  But some things are much better viewed from afar.  That snow on the mountain may be all dark and grey, seen close up.  Joyce
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8 posted 2001-04-22 04:51 PM


It is hard when we can't be with the ones we love...I felt the sorrow in this one, it is beautiful and so is the picture.

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee


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9 posted 2001-04-22 04:53 PM


LIW:  why, that means a lot to me!  thank you so much!  I am glad you enjoy my writing!  

Tessa:  thank you!  I am glad you got something out of this one!  

SEA:  thanks!  glad you enjoyed this!  

JM:  NOPE, the answer definitely isn't the one I want to hear...but I ask anyway...so figure... ...but, yeah, yeah, I rhymed...nothing was flowin' today, so I figured I'd take a crack at it!  thanks so much for your continued support of my rhyming endeavors!     FROSTYPANTS??  Whoa...don't let THAT get out...

Sven:  thanks!  I am glad you liked this!  

Bill:  I have NO idea...if you find out, let me know!  but thank you so much for your kind reply!  

Joyce:  thank you for your compliments...and, yes, you may be right, but this, hmmm...I don't think so!  these things I ask about are definitely better close up!  thank you, m'friend!  

sp

to be with you...
I've tried to hide my passion,
but it's just no use...
piece by piece I lose it
when you walk in the room...

snowpants
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10 posted 2001-04-22 04:54 PM


Kathleen:  you sneaked in there on me!  yes, it is very hard not being able to be with the ones we love...thank you for your kind reply!!  glad you liked it!  

sp

to be with you...
I've tried to hide my passion,
but it's just no use...
piece by piece I lose it
when you walk in the room...

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11 posted 2001-04-25 03:05 PM


When I asked that question, the answer was because the need is one-sided... definitely not the answer I wanted! *S* Great poem... I enjoyed it very much!
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12 posted 2001-04-25 03:07 PM


Well done.

Live for love. Without love, you don't live.


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13 posted 2001-04-25 05:15 PM


suthern:  thank you, my friend...and, you will find that someone and the need won't be one sided...I appreciate your reply!  

Interloper:  thanks!  glad you liked it!  

sp

to be with you...
I've tried to hide my passion,
but it's just no use...
piece by piece I lose it
when you walk in the room...

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14 posted 2001-04-25 06:14 PM


The simple touch of your hand will be my undoing...
Relate much to the distance and desperation in this.  Enjoyed!

Speak when you are angry--and you'll make the best speech you'll ever regret...Laurence J. Peter

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