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VAS
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450
Oregon

0 posted 2001-04-21 12:00 PM


Well Aflame
Virginia Salter

The day is burning
it’s well aflame
my excuse to stay
is getting lame.

Toil calls
success can come
to tarry more
is surely dumb.

Yet playing here
taking time for you
is something  I’m
so prone to do.

This guilt I feel
is closing in
so much awaits
to stay is sin.

So weak am I
in lingered want
you words do vie
cajole and haunt.

How might I break
away my friend
how might I find
a time to end?

How might I go
to do great deeds
tear me away
from glorious seeds?

©April 21, '01

[This message has been edited by VAS (edited 04-21-2001).]

© Copyright 2001 Virginia Salter - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

1 posted 2001-04-21 01:34 PM


So weak am I
in lingered want
you words do vie
cajole and haunt.

How might I break
away my friend
how might I find
a time to end?

How might I go
to do great deeds
tear me away
from glorious seeds?
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my oh my...
talk about poetic mirrors...
I have been trying to tear myself from the flame for over a year now....
Virginia this is a very cool poem,
I love the premise of it and the way you used the anology of the flame.
well done poetess... very!!

I love your imperfections ... I love your everything ...
Your broken heart ... your broken wings.


EagleScorpion
Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644
Here, Now, Forever
2 posted 2001-04-21 01:40 PM


This writing reflects some very developed skill and thought that leaves me perplexed and in total wonder. Congratulations on being who you are.

Love is God. Love is war. Love is what your life is for.

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

3 posted 2001-04-21 02:58 PM


Wow...I love this...and as Jan said...Mirrors indeed...I enjoyed this much!
VAS
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450
Oregon
4 posted 2001-04-21 03:28 PM


thank you all for reading, I was pretty sure there would be several here that could relate to this conundrum

at least I've sandwiched in more than an hour of yard work, weed pulling, this morning and cleaning up the kitchen

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