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Coal Surrender
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since 2001-04-01

Posts 84
U.S.

0 posted 2001-04-21 09:27 AM

Against the Storm

Dream
a beach
with me tonight --
turn down both sides
of the bed, and fluff
my pillow.
Hold my sight like a candle
against the storm...
your delicate hand cupping the flame.
See by my light, the moonbeams glitter
of lace cut waves at scurried play along the shore.
Breathe -- with my lungs the salt sifted air,
and feel my heart race in the swell of cresting tides.
Dream with me an ocean of love, walk in hips sweet tickle,
the gold string ever binding...a kiss of spirits twine.

Coal

A Whisper's Caress
Senior Member

since 2000-11-03

Posts 791
on the horizon of a fairytale

1 posted 2001-04-21 10:07 AM

this is ever reaching to the heart....beautiful from start to finish.

May your dreams always dance to the rhythm of a lover's heartbeat...

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2001-04-21 10:11 AM

You built this one up beautifully, the storm was hardly perceptible...at first...

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

3 posted 2001-04-21 10:55 AM

Hold my sight like a candle
against the storm...
your delicate hand cupping the flame.
See by my light, the moonbeams glitter
of lace cut waves at scurried play along the shore.
Breathe -- with my lungs the salt sifted air,
and feel my heart race in the swell of cresting tides.
Dream with me an ocean of love, walk in hips sweet tickle,
the gold string ever binding...a kiss of spirits twine.
===================

oh my... big ole *sigh*
this is excellent...
superb imagery and enchanting mix of emotion, romance, desire, and nature.
very cool poem CS

I love your imperfections ... I love your everything ...
Your broken heart ... your broken wings.

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

4 posted 2001-04-21 03:51 PM

Janet Marie took the words right out of my mouth if I could have thought them so well. Coal, you have a fan!!!A fan that has a lump in her throat and tears in her eyes, overwhelmed with the beauty of your work. Forgive me if this is embarrassing, I think I'm a groupie!

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

5 posted 2001-04-21 04:08 PM

Coal~
This is lovely~

'See by my light, the moonbeams glitter
of lace cut waves at scurried play along the shore.'

I've played on that beach ...
beautiful remembrances tugging here.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

6 posted 2001-04-21 04:22 PM

absolutely every word is gorgeous.........*sighs*

SEA

Coal Surrender
Member

since 2001-04-01

Posts 84
U.S.

7 posted 2001-04-22 08:56 AM

  Whisper's Caress
  Karilea
  Janet
  Virginia
  Marge
  SEA

   Such great replies! Thank you!

              Coal

Nate Dogg
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since 1999-11-15

Posts 1658
Georgia, Fulton

8 posted 2001-04-23 10:49 PM

A beautiful piece, I enjoyed it!

Nathan

Coal Surrender
Member

since 2001-04-01

Posts 84
U.S.

9 posted 2001-04-24 08:11 AM

Thanks Nate, you're most kind.

Coal

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

10 posted 2001-04-25 04:04 PM

Beautiful.... I like this very much! *S* And welcome to Passions! *S*

Coal Surrender
Member

since 2001-04-01

Posts 84
U.S.

11 posted 2001-04-26 02:21 PM

Thank you for replying, suthern. Your thoughts are appreciated.

Coal

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