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Her Song.........#3
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Her Song.........#3 |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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She didn't sing it just for me. I knew that from the start But, when I heard the melody, It poured into my heart. A voice whose passion filled the sky, Smooth notes held loud and long Yet gentle as a mother's sigh, That's how she sang her song. A small part of the audience I sat, quite mesmerized, And felt her touch my every sense, Form teardrops in my eyes. To me there was no day or night, There was no right or wrong. My world was filled with sweet delight The way she sang her song. Could she imagine, singing there She had, so easily, Calmed my fears and stripped me bare For all the world to see? Although her lips seemed not to move Her notes came loud and strong To put me in a wondrous groove The way she sang her song. Hard times will never get me down. No worries bother me For I'll just hum that wondrous sound She placed inside of me. Whatever battles I must face That life may send along, My world remains a glorious place Because she sang her song. She'll never know my love for her, Won't feel my passion's rage. A faceless soul I'll be - a blur She looks on from the stage. It matters not, for in my soul She always will belong. She's made my life completely whole The way she sang her song. |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
Wow! I don't know how you do it, but I'm so glad you do. This is wonderful.  |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Balladeer~ I think I'm just gonna like this one very much !  *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Deer, It's rare that I'll give out a "WOW" but you've got one here. An excellent write with perfect flow. Thanks for this. Michael Proust- |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Ahh...I think he should have gone and tapped on the stage door, poor guy! Okay, I could almost hear you in my living room study reciting this, you have gotten way to far into my head (LMAO), the beat goes on! And thank goodness for that, what a great poem. ~*~ If the want a rainbow ~ you have to put up with a little rain ~*~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
your mastery shows once again...I loved the sweet melancholy in the emotion of this, and of course, as always, impeccably constructed. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Another beauty from you Michael ... perfect in your cadence and rhyme, what a lovely mood you've set with these tender words of adulation. Pure and genuine emotions to cherish and carry within, long after the song has been sung. Seems to be what your poetry does for me sweet poet.  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
sigh.........so beautiful Deer. What a gift you have, thank you for sharing it with us. We are blessed. *s* On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
One feels the cushion of the chairs, the dim lights flicker, the spot light is on her ... and the music floats, each individual in the audience hearing what they want to hear. Thanks for sharing what you heard. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
She sang... and you Rock your cadence is such a joy to partake in. excellent Deer ... this just dances on the page in its melody and harmony.  I love your imperfections ... I love your everything ... |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
beautifully written, Michael, with the cadence, flow, and rhythm of a lyrical song.... i can hear it..... this poem should be put to music..... my piano needs to play this.... you are a very fine writer, y'know that? music can do wonderful things for a person's spirit, can't it? .... thank you for this..... |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
And fine writer that you are, this is lovely. Joyce |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
It must have been a wonderful song, deer, for you to have written such a perfect poem. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I remember this... and the melody still lingers sweetly. *S* Beautiful, Deer one! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Balladeer, Did you make a tape? I'd really like to hear that song. LOL Excellent. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
TennesseeAngel...I'm so glad I do it for you. Thank you!! Marge...and it likes you!!! Auguste..your WOW is deeply appreciated... Mysteria..I have little doubt your head would be a wonderful place to be Thank you!serenity...I thank you Kit...what beautiful words you bless me with..I thank you... Gentle Spirit..we are all blesses to have each other, I think. Thank you very much for such a beautiful thought... Lady...that is so true..each hears what they want...such is the reality of it all. Thank you! Janet Marie...I may rock but you roll....right into my heart. Thank you, spamsteress doreen...crank that piano up start composin'! Yes, music is life...Joyce...thank you for such kind words Martie...it was. You had to be there suthern...as do memories of good friends...like you Seymour....it was a command performance . Thank you, Sy |
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