Open Poetry #13 |
Forbidden Fruit |
SEA
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since 2000-01-18
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I can't have you though I'd love just one taste one time one moment to steal a moment to feel you to hear you to see you yet it's impossible for so many reasons we both know you are forbidden fruit and I am not Eve ~SEA~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
some things are worth buring in hell for.... take a bite of the apple .. only you and Adam will know cool poem of temptation Sea |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
SEA! Free verse! You go girl! |
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SEA
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Janet~ I'd know and that makes the difference.....no bites for me.... Sunshine~ thank you ~SEA |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Be Eve if only in your thoughts and dreams...this was a longing I can relate to...be well... Lauren~ *** "Within you I lose myself |
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SEA
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since 2000-01-18
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Lauren~ that's where I keep it...nice and safe thanks SEA |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I hear ya Sea-girlie... dont do the crime if ya cant do the time |
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SEA
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Janet~ lol.....yes, exactly...love ya girlie girl SEA |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Awesome free verse SEA. I love the ending imagery...forbidden fruit and eve...what kind of fruit, I wonder though? LOL |
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SEA
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
PK~ I'm glad you liked.....as for the fruit.....I'd say the sweet kind.... SEA |
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Just A Woman Senior Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 507 |
Excellent, Sea! Loved the ending to this. Perfect.
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
well done in it's simplicity *s ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
SEA---I love this--and sometimes the world is an orchard of temptation! Sounds like YOU won't be late for supper tho! Great job with this one, lovie! |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Sea,...hopping in line here to add my thoughts on this. It's well written, and also something that I think many can relate to. But yes,...have them where they're safe if tasting the forbidden is out of the question for you. Take care. Enjoyed reading. *Peace. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Wow. Now I see why your were "absent" for a while. Really recharged your batteries, no? BRAVO! Write on! Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Better off left just where you left it. Tempting fruits of human frailty, I know how you feel. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Free verse this good makes me jealous! Very nice job. --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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shadydaze Member
since 2000-10-02
Posts 85 |
i guess you may alreday know, but this makes a great read. i can understand your feelings here, too. keep it up. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed this very much Sea...James |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Wish I'd stopped to consider these thoughts. Great poem...love that last line! |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
SEA, can I interest you in some forbidden fruit-of-the-looms? |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Smart girl! Great poem. ~*~ If the want a rainbow ~ you have to put up with a little rain ~*~ |
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bslicker
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
hmmmmm.... A smile a day keeps the world in smile's. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Any thoughts beyond telling you this is great fled my poor mind when I read Bal's comment... I can only ROFL! *G* |
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