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Quiet Time
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Quiet Time |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Quiet Time it’s that gray above that blue above that gold there, in the western sky, just above that pinkish tinge fading quietly bidding me, whispering, beseeching me to tell you it’s that time to put away the rhyme and lay your head on this pillow to put your heart in my hands it’s quiet time, my sweet, good night |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Sunshine, you blend those colors perfectly to create an excellent description...this is very nice....in a quiet way  |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ So softly painted. Shhhh ! Night ! Jeezzz .. how realistic is this ? I even found myself typing quietly so as not to disturb you. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine, I agree with both the above. *L* |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Lovely writing. All writing comes |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Goodnight, sweet Karilea. :-) Love it. Michael Proust- |
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Waseem Cheema Member
since 2001-03-16
Posts 369Pakistan |
and lay your head on this pillow to put your heart in my hands is Excellent. Very Nice I love to nice poetry. |
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Waseem Cheema Member
since 2001-03-16
Posts 369Pakistan |
and lay your head on this pillow to put your heart in my hands is Excellent and Intersting. I love to nice poetry. |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Ah....what a perfect way for me to finish off my day......I sleep while the world is waking!  Live...Love...Be grateful for both!! |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Such beautifully whispered sentiments Karilea ... just lovely! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Kari - this is lovely! I really like the flow...and the short lines...it works wonderfully... yes as usual I have a suggestion - what do you think about trying it without the punctuation?  KAll obscurity starts with a danger: |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This is so endearing and quieting. The colors fell right onto my pillow LOve this one Liz |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari dear heart, enchanting as always, you have written this with such skill and style. YOU knew I'd love this one, all yours go into my library, some have a special place though and this is destined for the library of my heart. Wonderful work love as you know Love and warm stuff Puck  Pas excellence madam, formidable, (How's the French coming along?) Comme ci comme ca? Mon petit chou!! Take back the hope you gave,- I claim |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Lovely..... |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Oh, lucky heart, you rest in good, soft, silken hands. Lovely resting place. Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
What a beautiful, colorful invitation. Enjoyed! Speak when you are angry--and you'll make the best speech you'll ever regret...Laurence J. Peter |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Shhhhhhhh.............I'm getting drowsy.........zzzzzzzzzzzz. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Sunshine, it's a lullabye of the heart. write on Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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