Open Poetry #13 |
On Holding On Loosely |
Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
So speaks my love in whispers sir, The truth from me you've asked. As time and distance fail to call, To reality's unfated grasp. So knows my love no boundaries, dear This heart from me you hold, As distance lashes with his whip, I'm loved but left and cold Forever daunting is this haunt, That love, no boundaries knows, Forever whispers in your eyes, Rapid beating never slows. I love you concentrated, sir You'd know not the difference today, Of whispers granted in the night, And of borders left to slay. And so you'd leave me lying here, Love's ravaged body tamed. A gasp of breath for one last air, Suspended teardrops ever framed. Light knows borders even now, My case too vividly makes, For images stand too near these truths, Strength this journey takes. still d-i-s-c-o-n-n-e-c-t-e-d I am bound by this, you see...to become Night's sole mistress, and I am jealous in my endeavours for his attention. [This message has been edited by Temptress (edited 04-18-2001).] |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
excellent!!! I think that you've really made a breakthrough with your writing these days Temptress. . . this is wonderful. . . --------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
TemptyOne~ Yeah ! What Sven said ! I do think I enjoy your rhyme ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
absolutely!!! |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Beautifully written!! All writing comes |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
Absolutly beautiful, this reads so smoothly and it can all be summed up in the last line which is the whole truth of the matter. Strength this journey takes. |
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