Open Poetry #13 |
The Fate of Mind |
Blackdrake Member
since 1999-07-23
Posts 83Depends on the day :) |
You fill my eyes with your sight I am lost within time My soul with yours enters flight To pass the darkness within the night Forever among the stars Staring into the night we talk Worlds pass unnoticed and forgotten By moonlight paths we walk Among the forrest roads we stop To stand within a moment The candle-light reflects your thought As you stare intently All your dreams come but naught For everything you've always fought Sliping past your reach Betrayal stings your heart sore As the mind wills to chance Your form protests ever more Years of practice whatever for To dance in life forever And yet you stand staring Defiently into fate Hoping and yet still daring To Judge how well your faring Leaping after your dreams Mysterious is the shadow, walking down the path of light. ~~ ¥ ~~ [This message has been edited by Blackdrake (edited 04-13-2001).] |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
"And yet you stand staring Defiently into fate Hoping and yet still daring To Judge how well your faring Leaping after your dreams" ain't it the truth? and you have to do it, don't you? nicely done |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This likes me very much, back to the top! |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Sensitive but tough. Good work, Blackdrake! I like it! Krawdad |
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Kay Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 70 |
oh, my goodness, how I lived every line....pretended it was for me.....how wonderful this was, I mean is! Kay |
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Beckalini Member
since 2001-01-02
Posts 151Yorkshire, England |
Gosh, how jealous am I!? This is beautifully penned, with amazing rhyme and rhythm. So unfair! I really did love this one ~Becky~ |
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Blackdrake Member
since 1999-07-23
Posts 83Depends on the day :) |
Thank you all you are too kind. Mysterious is the shadow, walking down the path of light. ~~ ¥ ~~ |
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