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Open Poetry #13

After all

PoeticaL
Member

since 2001-03-31

Posts 50

0 posted 2001-04-09 11:03 PM

caressing me
not the thinness
of flesh
deeper and stronger
somewhere off in the distance
where tears create
waterfalls that slide over
rocks with sharp edges
smoothing them

my feet walk over fears
slickness with beauties deftness
because my panic
is calmed by
a shadows hand in my dreams

the morning’s sun shines
right through dirty windows
creating mosaic pictures on my wall
my eyes open into a new day
and I crawl from my loneliness
reaching for you inside my reality
perhaps you are there after all

"I'm a junkyard full of false starts....Elliot Smith"

RMW
Senior Member

since 2001-03-21

Posts 1424

1 posted 2001-04-09 11:22 PM

".....my eyes open into a new day..." Beautiful.

Brad Majors

Member Elite

since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

2 posted 2001-04-10 02:31 PM

So beautiful , I .. wow .. you took my breath away!

doreen peri
Member Elite

since 1999-05-25

Posts 3812
Virginia

3 posted 2001-04-10 04:15 PM

"my feet walk over fears"

"and i crawl from my loneliness"

great lines.... this one has a smooth rhythm and a feel which reaches straight from your heart out to the reader

nicely done, my friend

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

4 posted 2001-04-10 05:31 PM

enjoy

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

5 posted 2001-04-10 05:47 PM

quote:
the morning’s sun shines
right through dirty windows
creating mosaic pictures on my wall

I see this...so clearly! Well done!

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