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- Nocturnal Soliloquy - (suggestions for a better title?!)
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- Nocturnal Soliloquy - (suggestions for a better title?!) |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA 
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Nocturnal Soliloquy ~~*~*~*~*~~ In the dead of night, hour is frost-stung by woe's venom bite, eve of enigma, once more, ensnares haunting a mangled mind, too void for repair, mockingbird bellows bliss-kissed tune shadows defeat melody, silence resumes, pain, perpetual, is reality, it seems nightmares plunder virginal dreams, starlight erupts, succumbing to gloom, earth, eclipsed, mimics malachite moon, desolation of heart grows ever strong slashed with screams of grief's gong, doomed, entombed by tampered pleas, hope withdraws, scorched by subdued fantasies, burden's grip banishes heart's delight saving-grace expires in bleak of night... I beg of thee, nocturnal phantom, demon of chill cease this unending tyranny, release my will begone from thy ill-stricken heart, vile torment, return to underworld's den, take with thee, this entrapment, remove this rabid curse, exit my essence unholy beast, I plead, solicit my soul no more, uproot depression's seed, advocate of dark, release this hold, no more to vindicate, I hunger for freedom, only death's slumber shall liberate.... nulled of worth, debilitated, I remain, unrelinquished of regret's debris, "alas, I have conquered...misery, eternal, is yours," quoth he.... ~~*~*~*~*~~ ~*By Melissa Honeybee*~ [This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (edited 03-25-2001).] |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well I loved it, but then I can relate! How about Malacite Moon? or ..."Oh yeah, well put up your dukes", just kidding  Great job. ~*~A poet is someone who reads more than they write ~*~ |
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Chelsea~ Member
since 2001-02-09
Posts 260Ontario, CANADA |
missy, my goodness, this is a piercing poem about depression! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
eve of enigma, once more, ensnares haunting a mangled mind, too void for repair, mockingbird bellows bliss-kissed tune shadows defeat melody, silence resumes, pain, perpetual, is reality, it seems nightmares plunder virginal dreams, starlight erupts, succumbing to gloom, earth, eclipsed, mimics malachite moon, ============================ my goodness..indeed.... whew Melis... you are working the imagery here!! this is a very "Poe-ish" purge my dear... so much expression and imagery to enhance the emotions... well done girlie... as for the title...I think the one you've chosen encompasses the whole poems message and works very well. and I too really like Mysteria's suggestion to use that phrase from your poem, its very poetic and cool sounding... so as always...the choice is the poets  oh you speak to me in riddles |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
wow. . . you've really taken on the darkness haven't you??? this is powerful. . . excellent. . . ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Melissa~ WOW ! Into the nocturnal depths you've taken this soliloquy ... Tremendously emotive thoughts in the midnight hour. Sometimes that's where we take our darkest journeys alone. Well done, poetess. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Tapestry of Dark.... now, my Melybee...something of a lighter note when the mood strikes.... |
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