Dark Poetry #3 |
depressing stuff |
dastard Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 55in tearing silence |
Unreturned love could destroy us both it burns our souls, bodies are clothes destroyed inside the corpse will fall will never move, not even crawl love can be both wealth and plague could make you bloom, could make you fake but oneway-love is different, see? it only costs one casualty "Let me light my lamp, says the star and doesn't ask for long, if it helps to remove the darkness" ~free translation, Honey |
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Inanothertime Member
since 2001-06-29
Posts 72 |
I liked this--hope the next corner you turn,is unto a two-way street. |
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One New Member
since 2001-06-21
Posts 7 |
Possibly harsh, but does anybody look to the future and what they can make of it? I don't want to be the person that is crucified for saying this, but do you think that we should be not just be writing about what is and what has been but what could be? Be it idealistic but I'd love to see someone pushing through an ideal, be it surreal or plain english, I'd love to see some poetry that is truly expressive, not just a release from the tensions of life. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Then why don't you write such a poem One? Dastard...what you say is true enough...it's also inevitable; it's a part of life. Liked it. K |
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Jeen Member
since 2000-06-07
Posts 91 |
Dastard Just wanted to say hi. I'm kind of a new member (I haven't posted much although I've registered lasr year.) I didn't think it was "depressing stuff" and I liked the ending. Jeen |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
OI!!!.... *Appluds* this is awesome..took my breath away..it really did custard. its in my library for ever and ever and ever... keep writing, poet... |
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JT Member
since 2001-09-28
Posts 69Arkansas, USA |
That really is good. Really well written. This will be in some college poetry textbook someday. JT |
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