Dark Poetry #3 |
All I Have to Give |
G. A. Webb Member
since 2000-01-21
Posts 441Stanton, California, USA |
I saw the light I watched it fall I felt the fright I heard the call Seething deep Inside of me Opening wounds No one can see Bleeding inside My shell is so hard My life’s been tried My heart’s been scared Yet still I live Though I don’t know how I want to give But have nothing now Than this tattered shell And heart that bleeds A life spent in hell And this soul that needs Just a touch From time to time And with that much I’ll end this rhyme G. A. Webb Regret not that which you have done, |
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qtpieelmo Senior Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 989Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY |
Awe this flows so well & has so much feeling--i like LOVE ELMO <3 |
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Dark Kisses Member
since 2001-06-24
Posts 364Flat lands of Kansas |
Isnt it funny how we can go through so much pain and unless we tell someone, no one even knows it. There are times I just want to scream to the world and ask for a hand of concern. Yet as I look around, no one is near by. As for your *outter shell* well I just call that my *wall*. I built it for protection and when I do let it down, it seems to go right back up. I have the scars to prove it. Great write btw, Mags Don't fear your tears! |
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Inanothertime Member
since 2001-06-29
Posts 72 |
nicely done, truly felt, hope new light touches you soon. |
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G. A. Webb Member
since 2000-01-21
Posts 441Stanton, California, USA |
Thank you everybody for the responces. I wrote this about two months ago, but have no fear, I'm not really that depressed anymore. Though there was a time when I was and even more so. I've just learned to give up on the very idea of love because for me it doesn't exist and that is a fact. So instead of beating myself up over it, I write and get those thoughts out of my head. Thank you all again. Dose that make any since? To me it dose. Anyways, take care! G Regret not that which you have done, |
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Dark Kisses Member
since 2001-06-24
Posts 364Flat lands of Kansas |
Ohhhhhhhh no! Dont give up on *love*. Okay someone told me this once and I will share it with you now. (nope u cant run from me either!! lol ) They told me that I look to hard for love. That once I stop wanting it soooooooooo bad that it will find me. (not that it has either ) Just please dont give up on it. That would be like giving up on one of your dreams! Okay I am preaching here and I didnt want to do that either. I just hate for anyone to give up on such a beautiful thing, ya know? Anyways, keep up the writing, I love it, Mags Don't fear your tears! |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
It flowed awesomely! Some lines that I enjoyed are: "Bleeding inside My shell is so hard My life’s been tried My heart’s been scared Yet still I live Though I don’t know how I want to give But have nothing now" I read that and went, 'WOW. I know how that is.' Thanks for the read. Hopefully things are looking up for you now. ~AF~ Psychopathic chickens are plotting against me... |
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G. A. Webb Member
since 2000-01-21
Posts 441Stanton, California, USA |
Dark Kisses: Thanks Mags. I'm ok, really. I just won't waste any more time looking for something that just isn't there. So if "love" dose exist out there for me somewhere, it'll just have to find me because I'm not looking any more. Thanks again. anonymousfemale: WOW! What a compliment, thank you! I'm so glad that you liked this piece so much and saddened to hear that you can relate. Hopefully that's not the case now. Do take care and thanks again. G Regret not that which you have done, Rather that which you haven't [This message has been edited by G. A. Webb (edited 07-20-2001).] |
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