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Christopher

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-02

Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration

0 posted 2001-06-28 03:14 AM

Crevices of a Dream
©2001 C.G. Ward
black tempest:
spite crashing despair through veins,
puncturing hope with bubbles of
divisive intentions.
cackling its mocking laughter…
calculating
the wave of depressive remembrance required
to impale comprehension...
with the ease of practice it
inflicts sleepless nightmares employing the skillset
of a demented masseuse.
assaulted, I can only yearn toward the power of daytime,
the strength of light -
for only in the darkness do spirits
ascend the chill of my spine
to tap into the core of feeling
buried beneath the crumblings of metaphorical stone.
battling only encourages;
reaction provoking stimulation,
with tears slicking the path just before despondency...
and yet to accept requires strength enough to bear
the damnation of desire in the form
of a white dress worn for another’s altar.
then
sometime toward mourning,
I wake my morning vow -
and though dawn dispels demons,
the memories remain. cruising the background
of awareness, I curse the night -
for its inspiration,
for its demands,
for its darkness...
for its reminders.

Amazing what a single bad day can produce, isn't it?

Phreak
Junior Member

since 2001-04-11

Posts 26

1 posted 2001-06-28 06:26 AM

Bad days... they suck. But how could we appreciate a good day without them? This is excellent writing. I hope today is a better day for you, and hey.. do me a favor? Write about it if it is. I can only imagine how much more beautiful that poem will be.

~PHREAK (hehe)

Kit McCallum

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Member Laureate

since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

2 posted 2001-06-28 09:44 AM

"with the ease of practice it
inflicts sleepless nightmares employing the skillset
of a demented masseuse."

Wow! Powerful sentiments Chris, excellent phrasing and flow. The intensity in the emotions coming through, nearly had these words leaping off my screen. An amazing write, much enjoyed!

Best wishes and hugs,
/Kit

Elizabeth Cor
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since 2000-10-13

Posts 879
Over the river and through the woods

3 posted 2001-06-28 01:58 PM

with tears slicking the path just before despondency...
and yet to accept requires strength enough to bear
the damnation of desire in the form
of a white dress worn for another’s altar.

This hit like a javelin... though, I can't decide if its the confirmation or your gift of words. You've gotten your sought after impact, whatever the case may be...

*hugs and sighs* What are we going to do with you, rock?

And, hey, I can say it too: "It's okay." And it will be. Love you dearly, and I do not desire that to end for any reason.

~pot

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Christopher

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-02

Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration

4 posted 2001-06-29 01:46 AM

Thanks m'friends... uhmm - you too PHREAK.

As I mentioned to the redoubtable ms. cor - t'was just a passing thing on a passing day... one where everything hit at once...

Peace

C

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

5 posted 2001-06-29 04:27 AM

I guess it's raining crap all over the world today, C. This is remarkable writing. (I take solace in the fact that if nothing else? My life is excellent writing material.)

"battling only encourages;
reaction provoking stimulation,..."

sort of like quicksand, huh?

Sigh with me on that note? And for what it's worth? HUGS too...although I'm sure hugging in quicksand will only speed up the process of sinking! (cheery sonova...gun, ain't I?)

Elizabeth Cor
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since 2000-10-13

Posts 879
Over the river and through the woods

6 posted 2001-06-29 05:57 PM

Redoubtable? *scowls* If I may requote you: "battling only encourages"... watch out for prickly e-mails, Mister.

*sigh* Despite me, yes, I like. Your writing has honestly improved in the last six months. Hmm... wonder what that means.

Karen: "I take solace in the fact that if nothing else? My life is excellent writing material." Hehe...

[This message has been edited by Elizabeth Cor (edited 06-29-2001).]

Verve
Member

since 1999-06-23

Posts 348
Singapore

7 posted 2001-07-01 02:13 AM

Wow. Very powerful piece you have here. Though I am sorry that the motivation behind the writing was none too pleasant.

Take care.

~verve

Fallen Angel of Darkness
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since 2001-01-17

Posts 26
Among the Shadows

8 posted 2001-07-01 02:22 AM

Wow. I'm sorry about the day you had...but look on the bright side, you got a WONDERFUL poem out of it, didn't you?

~* Megs *~

P.S. Luv the picture

"It's only after we lost everything that we are free to do anything. " -- Tyler Durton, Fight Club

[This message has been edited by Fallen Angel of Darkness (edited 07-01-2001).]

Christopher

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-02

Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration

9 posted 2001-07-02 05:13 AM

karen... I've never tried to hug quicksand, but I won't judge your kinks.

mz. cor - oooh I'm scared.

verve - thanks for the comments and sentiments... we all have bad days, better to purge them than rein them in I think.

megs - I like megans...

lol - you have a striking resemblance in manner to one I know now. interesting. thank you for your time and compliments... uhh, that WAS a compliment, wasn't it?

C

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