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carolinadreams Member
since 2000-07-20
Posts 142 |
they all seem to die around me can't they just stay the field they always seem to try around me doesn't anyone else feel they always seem so afraid but they confide within me they all try to climb my wall in the end i catch what falls they used to be so sweetly secure why can i only see the pure they used to mean what was said they used to live with heart instead they just seem to be why can't they just see to be they all pace like an ox why don't they test before they walk they all ask so many things i don't think they've asked is it too much to be they all seem to rely J.L. Koehler |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
some well drawn contrasts, my reading of this is watching your children grwoing up and how they change. Enjoyed reading "difference between love and comfortis that comfort's more reliable and true |
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carolinadreams Member
since 2000-07-20
Posts 142 |
I can only hope that my boy some day reads this, for him to understand, I will not hope, but for him to just read, and for any poet to read is an honor. Is it too abstract? Thanx |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
they all try to climb my wall in the end i catch what falls they used to be so sweetly secure why can i only see the pure they used to mean what was said they used to live with heart instead I am enjoying the intensity of your words ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
no I did not find it too abstract, maybe if you you put a sub heading or a dedication for your son. ONly if you are worried about the poem being misread. I think it is pretty clear in the images that you have written that is about your son. "difference between love and comfortis that comfort's more reliable and true |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
carolina dreams, I didn't know this was about your son but it was obvious it was about people who were close to you. I enjoyed this. write on Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
I didn't even know you had a son!! With my Dinny (Dylan) I like you, can only some of my life examples and poems and zest rub off on him one day. That when he reads some of my poems it will give him further insight into the woman I was... Nice work hon, and nice to see you here again.. Isis *Enlightenment is within all things* |
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