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Insignificance |
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baerlon Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 197Youngstown and East Liverpool, Ohio, USA |
I know this one is not great but i had to put something up! Oh well read it. I’m the only person it seems to matters to Imprisoned into that of which I cannot escape I watch afar waiting for release My every waking hour spent constantly seeking More often than not the light fades before I am ready Mile after mile as the light fades so does life Goodness has become but a shadow of the dark Greatness a caliber of material wealth Ghastly as it seems we all accept it for societies sake Social outtalking and ritualistic days Splashing off to work for measly pay Spiritual speaking is now the sinful way Now I sit here writing this foul piece Neglecting what needs to be said and Never reaching for the door I’m the only person it seems to matters to Imprisoned into that of which I cannot escape as I watch afar waiting for release There's a peace inside us all |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Goodness has become but a shadow of the dark Greatness a caliber of material wealth Ghastly as it seems we all accept it for societies sake Social outtalking and ritualistic days Splashing off to work for measly pay Spiritual speaking is now the sinful way these two verses reflect alot about the society in which we live powerful words. A turth well spoken "you are what you own in this land, you can be king and it all depends on the view and what you can see" Whipping boy |
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RebeccaJoy Junior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 35 |
I very much enjoyed your style of writing in this. The frustration and almost helplessness of watching what life becomes was excellent. I hope my comment does not offend. I liked this poem very much. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Now I sit here writing this foul piece Neglecting what needs to be said and Never reaching for the door I’m the only person it seems to matters to Imprisoned into that of which I cannot escape as I watch afar waiting for release ========================== hey bae ... saw your name on my thread and thought Id come over and see if I could find you... thank you for the very kind reply old friend...  and this expressive write touched many parts of me... sometimes it feels like we hold ourselves back most of all I have always said I am my own worst enemy. great to see your name here again take care jm I'm not right ... you're not wrong ... |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
baerlon, I've missed your work it's good to see you back. write on Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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