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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
"lost temple" in the garden of our newness we were ingenuous shameless lambs fit for sacred slaughter fattened on shoots of falsehood eyes wide open bleating out our innocence beneath the reaper's scythe across the harvest of seasons through wastelands of atonement blistered in bewilderment shunning the holy ground on this pilgrimage to pain upon the sands of Ozymandias from the stones of your resentment I have built a lost temple corrupted by blame like Samson of old bereft of strength overwhelmed with love hanging in chains of blindness striped by lashes of fault fashioned from my roots between these pillars whereupon our temple stands I shall strain in anguish putting asunder the covenant of that foundation which imprisons you for in the twilight of my sacrifice at the altar of your silence I am denied the flame of your eternal love "The rose, like the cactus flower, protects herself with thorns. We however, impale ourselves on their beauty." |
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Swamp¤Faeryie Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 393fairyland....of course;) |
hmm "shameless lambs" interesting,you write the most thought provoking stuff...this poem has many meanings for me,well done!! sammi much madness is divinest sense,and much sense the starkest madness~Emily Dickinson |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
And many meanings it doth have for me too, Sammi. Thanks for reading and commenting on all my writing. I appreciate your comments very much.  "The rose, like the cactus flower, protects herself with thorns. We however, impale ourselves on their beauty." coyote [This message has been edited by coyote (edited 05-12-2001).] |
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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
wow, riveting, powerful, so colorful in its imagery, that it really sets of the perfect display of visions to set the feel of this piece. I admire this one, greatly. With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free.. |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Thanks, DragonPoe. I appreciate you taking the time to read. "The rose, like the cactus flower, protects herself with thorns. We however, impale ourselves on their beauty." |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Ok it's time for me to ask the question. Have you tried for publishing yet? (Or have I already asked you that? Can't rem lol) Another great piece Billy.  K |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Thanks, K. That means a lot coming from you. No, I haven't tried to publish any of my poetry yet. How and where does one go about it? Billy "The rose, like the cactus flower, protects herself with thorns. We however, impale ourselves on their beauty." |
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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
came in to read this one again. Coyote, when you find out how to publish, let me know, I still haven't found the way that doesn't cost and arm and a leg to see my work in print. With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free.. |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This poem was simply amazing! I actually understood it! Very well done.....very!!!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
A perfect portrayl Coyote, of a man blinded by pain and loss... Bravo again!! Isis *Enlightenment is within all things* |
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amyX Junior Member
since 2001-04-02
Posts 32 |
I will respond with just this: imagination. passion. winds. deserts. all things sultry. all things sexy. all things trembling. very intoxicating. amyXX Victims, aren't we all? |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Thanks Javier, Glad you liked this one, and good to see ya back.  Isis, Thanks so much for reading and for your kind appraisal. AmyX, I'm pleased you thought so highly of my latest efforts. Thanks for reading and replying. "The rose, like the cactus flower, protects herself with thorns. We however, impale ourselves on their beauty." |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
Your use of metaphor still allows one to zero in on your intent.... a marvelous piece, I always enjoy finding your works.... |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Thank you, Decaflame. I like your pen name. But then, I work in the gas business. Decatherms and btu's, etc. Glad you liked it. Billy "The rose, like the cactus flower, protects herself with thorns. We however, impale ourselves on their beauty." |
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