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Dark Poetry #3

Descending From The Top

Kicking Kim
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since 2001-04-16

Posts 426
Cloud Cucko Land!

0 posted 2001-04-17 10:31 AM

Lucid mind, empty,
thoughts of shattered glass,
spiralling in a rainbow of colours.
Descending from another class.
Burnt out paper,
flakes of yesterday's news.
Ashes falling towards the ground,
sparks by an exploded fuse.

Rare, to fall from heirarchy.
Beneath that of before.
Reopening a mind, starting new.
Desperately searching for more.
Least competitive life,
competing to become the best,
standing ahead of further dreams.
Fighting to become the best.

Picking themselves from the floor,
creating a new form of being.
Draining blood in search of new identity,
regardless of what they are seeing.
Rotting, dying, bleeding, pain.
Playing a different song.
Falling, failing, strangled, insane.
Knowing where they belong.

[This message has been edited by Kicking Kim (edited 04-18-2001).]

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

1 posted 2001-04-17 01:56 PM

nicely written.
i liked it.
keep writing

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

2 posted 2001-04-18 02:38 AM

Welcome to Passions, Kim....

Glad you found your way here...

Good poem...I like the tone...one small thing:

'yesterdays news' needs to be 'yesterday's news'

Thanks for the read

All obscurity starts with a danger:
Your dangers are many. I
Cannot look much but your form suffers
Some strange injury
Sylvia Plath

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-04-19 01:39 AM

Very enjoyable read. I love your work. Truly amazing.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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