Dark Poetry #3 |
sara - inspired |
amyX Junior Member
since 2001-04-02
Posts 32 |
to chase her moment another second too late please let me forget retreat delicate screams surrounding love in the bitter war around us in this moment my world completes your hostility your world defeats my purpose to believe her beauty reflects a tainted surface please let me ask why yell out for infuriation inbetween the cries in this love weakening the path yet strayed your exception sacrifices the end to glance her way threatens my blind will please let me see this running down broken alleys disappeared in condescending in this dream haunted by afterthought memories of little footsteps guiding me to bury her fingers never healed the turning world please let go of me hidden within a shadow of truth whispers fail forgiven resistance in this moment everything except empty everything except beautiful to love her sacrifice a smile thought of heaven please let me wake up beside the dead to believe there is no emptiness in her moments * * * * *inspired by Waking the Dead* Victims, aren't we all? |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
"in this moment everything except empty everything except beautiful" Intriguing description here. Another fine work, Amy. "I hate quotes, they suck!" |
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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
Absolutely beautiful writing here. With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free.. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Amy. I love the way you have put this together, it's so smooth. write on Kethry. Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Wonderful piece. Very well written. Nicely done! --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
beautiful...it was like WOW thats all i can say...keep writing |
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Kicking Kim Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426Cloud Cucko Land! |
"In this dream haunted by afterthought" I particularly liked that quote because many dreams are afterthoughts of what has passed, and some are forsights into the future. Wow! This is a brilliant poem and beautifully written! I am amazed by the way it gives out several different emotions. To say you were inspired to write this poem, well now you have inspired us too! Excellent! Trult appreciative ^*~Kicking Kim~*^ [This message has been edited by Kicking Kim (edited 04-17-2001).] |
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