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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
"Cry, "Havoc!" and let slip the dogs of war." [Shakespeare, Julius Caesar, III,i] overture....... refugees along the road babies bear a heavy load dead or dying tales are told to this fragile human fold as mental mines explode in the arms of sorrow perfume rivers running mud holy bridges dripping blood monks or nuns are under hood praying for a greater good cryptic verses understood Lord, who are we to follow? rockets rip in flashing flight tracers strip across the night crippled cries in echoed fright pleading for salvation's light nightmares into daylight dream dying through the living scream righteousness, what does it mean? human sacrifice it seems cannot rush tomorrow requiem....... Surviving for our sins the dreaded work begins raindrops entwining limbs in serpentine conformity awaiting body bags and tags mothers holding folded flags honor guards in rags load a seething hemorrhage of deformity as distant crescendos grow to a crying sky's refrain lonely soaking soldiers know tears of war fall to earth as rain epilogue....... through the rain trudge ordained warriors plastic profaned phantoms of the fog fire and ice have tempered honor's sword and leashed once more a rabid "devil dog" "I hate quotes, they suck!" |
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Swamp¤Faeryie Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 393fairyland....of course;) |
very cool. It reminds me of Cantebury tales meets Baudelaire and dante's inferno...lol...i don't know why,but i love it anyhow. Esp. the last stanza. sammi much madness is divinest sense,and much sense the starkest madness~Emily Dickinson |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Thanks, Sammi.  You picked a strange trio there, and I like all of those works. lol But then war is a strange thing, too. "I hate quotes, they suck!" |
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mirror man Senior Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 814 |
Hello, Coyote. I agree. This is excellent. |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Amazing. You took me on a trip into your mind with this write. Very well done. I enjoyed this a great deal. One my my favs. I liked the scheme and style of it all....quite good!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Wow - this is great... it's quite a writer you are  KAll obscurity starts with a danger: |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Thanks for the compliment, Mirror Man. I like your work very much too. Javier, I'm glad you could see the images. Thanks, so much for reading and commenting. Kamla, You are the sophisticated writer, I'm just a "poetic psycho". lol "I hate quotes, they suck!" |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Exactly!! Could NOT have said it better! Makes me think and worry about this China/American thing going on at present *sigh*. We know, we have learned, but when will the war machines learn?? Isis *War produces one thing - Cemetaries. And in cemetaries there are no enemies!* |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Thank you, Isis. I'm glad you liked it. "I hate quotes, they suck!" |
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amyX Junior Member
since 2001-04-02
Posts 32 |
I read this piece and felt very "un-patriotic" maybe as if it was rebel yell very cool coyote i like the form as well (i'm not to keen on doin' it myself and i just barely learned the rules to a haiku - but, alas, i recognize!) |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Amy, Thanks again, for reading. "I hate quotes, they suck!" |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
*applauds* The style and format of this poem is awesome! I really like the story... very neat. Thanks for sharing this! It's very nicely done --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
amazing poem. i really enojed this one.great job. keep writing  |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Thanks, Marie & Albert. I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. "I hate quotes, they suck!" |
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baerlon Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 197Youngstown and East Liverpool, Ohio, USA |
This is a excellent peice, i hope to read more like it. There's a peace inside us all |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Thank you, Sir Baerlon. It's good to get the Britt perspective. I appreciate you reading and commenting. "I know that I am like the rain. There but for the grace of you go I." Paul Simon-Kathy's Song [This message has been edited by coyote (edited 04-20-2001).] |
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Godsend_1 Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 247great state of illinois |
ok wow is all i can say i loved it it like took me through wut you saw and felt and i loved it thank you for a great read later man |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Thanks, Godsend_1. Appreciate you reading. Glad ya liked it. "I know that I am like the rain. There but for the grace of you go I." |
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kodak Junior Member
since 2001-04-22
Posts 10London |
fantastic! Love your style: short verses full of strong images with a hint of the biblical. I especially liked the third verse. You remind me a little of William Blake. Have you ever read him? |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Thanks, Kodak. I've read a little of Blake's work. "The rose, like the cactus flower, protects herself with thorns. We however, impale ourselves on their beauty." |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Well psycho poet, you've captured the moment mad as it is. War is madness unleashed sadness. Loved the metre and rhyming scheme. write on Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Thanks so much for reading, Kethry. Your comments are most appreciated. "The rose, like the cactus flower, protects herself with thorns. We however, impale ourselves on their beauty." |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
awesome..job i really liked it the way u written it the way...u knoe..? nicely done keep writing  ...?death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Thanks Anonymous Albert ? For stopping by to read. "The rose, like the cactus flower, protects herself with thorns. We however, impale ourselves on their beauty." |
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