Dark Poetry #3 |
Of Greenest Grass (2nd of the 7DS) |
ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
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Panne447 Member
since 2001-04-03
Posts 196S.A. TX |
MA, Well- aside from the page format(the white on dark and the font wich I saw as italics but can't get it on topic review) I'd say this was one powerful piece. I liked the way you compared the wants/needs with the grass and its aspects...I remember the 'cuddled' line too - very good all around. Will be looking for more of your work. Panne |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
Panne ... the reason you're not seeing it in "Topic Review" is because it is entirely an image ... i find posting images such as this allows me to post using the original formats in which my pieces are written and appear in my manuscripts ... thanks so much for reading and appreciating ... |
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Swamp¤Faeryie Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 393fairyland....of course;) |
greenest grass and envious roots,do you save the best for last or what? I'm personaly green with envy you're poetry seems to get better and better!! samantha much madness is divinest sense,and much sense the starkest madness~Emily Dickinson |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
Swamp¤Faeryie ... thanks for reading and appreciating ... "the best for last"? ... oh, i feel there's much more to come ... this 7 Deadly Sin series was interesting and educational to research before starting to write ... i get nearly as much enjoyment out of that aspect of writing as i do the writing itself ... thanks again. |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
I liked the unchewed greener grass analogy here, Mark. Very polished work, as usual. "I hate quotes, they suck!" |
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Swamp¤Faeryie Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 393fairyland....of course;) |
Well the last line was my favorite,although not necessarily the BEST line,but it does always seem you save your punches for last,can't wait for the rest of the 7 deadlies... |
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amyX Junior Member
since 2001-04-02
Posts 32 |
I am simple in thought for you: I like the visuals and in a moment it turned out to be way more impressive than cud. My critique: best when read outloud in an open pasture. Very cool. Victims, aren't we all? |
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