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Temptress*Moon
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since 2001-01-15

Posts 240
Long Island, NY

0 posted 2001-03-29 12:03 PM

The goddess of the moon
Frowns upon this withering soul
Watching every tear i drop
Confessing my untold sorrows
To sit benealth your craddling glow
Sends my spirits in a dance
You are the only one that will listen, without judging me for what i have done
Precious Goddess of the Moon
the keeper of my thoughts
Look down upon my sadness
Every night when i Turn to you
Cradle me, as i cry to you

[This message has been edited by Temptress*Moon (edited 03-29-2001).]

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

1 posted 2001-03-29 04:35 AM

Well done...I almost wish for the same.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

2 posted 2001-03-29 06:47 AM

You made me think of some recent experiences.
the importance of having someone that we respect that will just listen to us and not judge us and my prayer on desperate nights...rare times...when I pray that God will take me in his arms and love me...because sometimes it seems that he is the only one...James

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

3 posted 2001-03-29 06:56 PM

This is so poignant, Temptress...a nice read.

One thing I should mention though

'craddle' is spelled 'cradle'

K

Xeonox

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since 2000-04-01

Posts 1764
CA, USA

4 posted 2001-03-30 12:01 PM

You see the godess of moon as a source of external "psychology". The word usage is quite nice. I enjoyed the way it flows.

Ronil (Inspiration for my poems is all around me for my muse is my reality.)

Yu Lan
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since 2000-04-13

Posts 1462
New Zealand

5 posted 2001-03-30 03:34 AM

You make me so sad with this poem.. that is my forever wish.. that someone could want to listen.. and be that moon.. but sometimes it really is the only comfort.. the moon won't ever make you feel bad, and it's kind of soothing, just knowing something is always there.. 'coz ppl sure as hell aren't always..
I liked this, Temptress*Moon.. so deeply written.. I really liked this.

-Lynne

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Kethry
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since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

6 posted 2001-03-30 04:53 PM

TemptressMoon,
deeply moving.
Kethry

Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

7 posted 2001-03-31 04:34 PM

Very emotion filled. Beautiful work.. Nicely done. Thanks for the read.

--Marie

It's true that we don't know what we've got until we lose it, but it's also true that we don't know what we've been missing until it arrives.

mirror man
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since 2001-01-08

Posts 814

8 posted 2001-04-01 03:06 AM

Yes, this is good.

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