Dark Poetry #3 |
Cold Comfort |
Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Well meaning words are none the less just that , my friend , just that . For I hear in their sugared tones the dischord of goodbye , and ice forms where heart's blood did flow 'till chilled unto the bone , Cold Comfort is a place I've known too well to ask you why . Obsidian reflects where once a promised future lay . Now stygian are thoughts your parting words have stripped and there , I see that old familiar place that beckons my return . Cold Comfort wraps me in it's cloak against the world of care . And I shall dwell here for a time 'till mem'ries frost receeds , amongst the darkened ashes of a fire died of neglect. The words you kindly spoke perhaps for you fulfilled some need , but I've worn their cold comfort thousand-fold around my neck , and gazed into it's onyx depths and known it's truth once more . There's no more comfort in the cold than was the time before . [This message has been edited by Dr.Moose1 (edited 03-25-2001).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"There's no more comfort in the cold than was the time before." Nice writing...James |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Doc, so true, so real. *HuGS* Write on Keth Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Lady in Red Member
since 2000-02-16
Posts 147 |
Oh my goodness Doc! I've never seen you this dark before! Did you take the wrong pills? Can I make you happy by informing you our Andrew has posted in the Pub? Or are you beyond 'Stute salvation? Perhaps an extra hour in the rubber room will make you smile, or that special red straitjacket? Should I call for Nurse Crachet? Hmm... I'd tell you a dirty joke, but you know these walls have ears and 'Drew would colour me instead of his canvas if he'd find out... amazing how you manage to write good poetry while having a bad trip and you know what strikes me most? I think I comprehend what you're speaking of... scary thought though! |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
James Michael, Thanks for the read and comments ,even us jokers have our moments . Doc Kethry, My , you do get around , don't you ? Thanks for stopping by . Don't plan to be here long . Too much other nonsense to write . Felt good to purge though . Can't be carrying all that extra baggage around . Gotta travel light . See ya in school . Doc My Dear Red , Will have to be lookin' up ol' buddy Drew . At the Pub you say ? Can't make it tonight but I'll drop in first chance I get . Thanks , always a pleasure . Doc |
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Swamp¤Faeryie Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 393fairyland....of course;) |
hmmm very interesting....i like it!! Trés bien!!!!!!!!!! swampie sam much madness is divinest sense,and much sense the starkest madness~Emily Dickinson |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
SwampFaerie, My thanks for the R& R . Sorry for the delay in replying , trizzle - trazzle you know . Again , my thanks . Doc |
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Swamp¤Faeryie Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 393fairyland....of course;) |
trizzle-trazzle well i've never heard it put like that,but yes i do know.lol sorry i'm just being silly |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
hello Dr. Moose ... a fine Sonnet with many twists and turns ... an enjoyable read and i'll read again. A couple of oddities though: "Cold Comfort wraps me in it's (its) cloak against the world of care." "And I shall dwell here for a time 'till mem'ries (mem'ry's) frost receeds , amongst the darkened ashes of a fire died of neglect. The words you kindly spoke perhaps for you fulfilled some need , but I've worn their cold comfort (a) thousand-fold around my neck , and gazed into it's (its) onyx depths and known it's (its) truth once more." again, nice work. [This message has been edited by ma miller (edited 04-04-2001).] |
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