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Temptress*Moon Member
since 2001-01-15
Posts 240Long Island, NY |
Alone i sit and cry My tears going unnoticed Shutting out life Surrendering to my demons Scared and confused Why am i this way? The person i grew up to be Why do i feel my soul Slowly slipping away? I preach my own advice To many who reach for a hand Why isn't it possible to mend My own pain? If i had to make a wish I would close my eyes and say I wish upon a gentle person To release me of this pain  3/8/01 Danyel L. Azar I slept and dreamed that life was beauty was thy dream then a shadowy lie? -ESH- [This message has been edited by Temptress*Moon (edited 03-09-2001).] |
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Jeremy Redinger Junior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 46 |
A wonderful write... but there's more to it... Your tears do not go unnoticed, your sadness not ignored. Sometimes one who helps others cannot help themselves... That's what other people are for sometimes. We all need an outlet, someone we know and care about, someone we trust... Someone to talk to. If you ever need someone to talk to, I'm there for you. That goes for anyone reading this too, if you ever need someone to talk to, my email is always open, my ear always listening. Sincerely, Jeremy |
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Verve Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 348Singapore |
Hey ... I think a lot of us often wonder why we turn out the way we do. Sometimes we may not like what we see in the mirror anymore. But I think it's important to be able to see beyond all that we can't be and be happy for what we have been blessed with. Things can only get better, ya? Take care  |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
Temptress*Moon ... i've read this several times now and the meaning is clear, i wonder if focusing on the cause of pain would give it more substance ... what are your demons? ... i really liked the "I wish upon a gentle person" line ... thanks. |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Sad one hon. Myself and others have found ourselves in similar situations, it's like you give it all for everyone else. Always being there, helping, lending an ear, boistering those egos, and then when YOU are done, no one is there for you to do same. All you can do is surround yourself with similar minded friends, who are like you, therefore there when you need a hand or a boost. It took me 30 years to realise this, but once you do things do get better.. hang tough!!!  Isis *War produces one thing - Cemetaries. And in cemetaries there are no enemies!* ~Isis~~Sovereign of the Spirit. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Interesting poem...James |
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JohnDLeclare Junior Member
since 2000-07-26
Posts 43 |
I think every dream lost takes some of our soul with it. Keep writing. John |
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Necro Draconis Member
since 2000-05-19
Posts 115 |
Couldn't have said it better myself. |
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Ginners Member
since 2000-07-22
Posts 339Mullica Hill, New Jersey |
Temp- as always a wonderful write. I wish that i could give you a big hug and make it all better  |
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Jellybean King Member
since 2001-03-07
Posts 153Jelly, Bean |
I loved this because the questioning leads to the answer...a gentle person to take away the pain...In my reading I think interwoven in your words is the idea that humans were not designed to fix our own faults...but rather it is our nature to interact/need others (that gentle soul/person)...if that were not so, then we would be complete unto ourselves...this built in vulnerability gives us the compassion to give, and the humility to receive. Very much enjoyed! Jellybean King |
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