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Starsfalling
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since 2003-03-18
Posts 94
some where deep in the shadows

0 posted 2003-09-11 08:48 PM



Show me
The way to redemption
Freeing me from this sinful burden
Dragging my feet
I search for the one to forgive me
She hides from me
Forever I shall wander
And yet never once glimpse her
To do so with a smile
Is all I can hope


i lost my musical inspiration so if the ending is kinda dead you know why... but oh well i liked it

-lance

There is no peace among the stars, only an eternity of carnage and slaughter and the laughter of thirsting gods

© Copyright 2003 Lance Keber - All Rights Reserved
Lexy
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since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California
1 posted 2003-09-11 09:48 PM


I like the end actually. It's hopeful. I like your style its pleasent to the eyes. Good job here Lance.
~Lex  

[This message has been edited by Lexy (09-11-2003 09:49 PM).]

Starsfalling
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since 2003-03-18
Posts 94
some where deep in the shadows
2 posted 2003-09-11 10:52 PM


:-D thank you very much

There is no peace among the stars, only an eternity of carnage and slaughter and the laughter of thirsting gods

littlewing
Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
3 posted 2003-09-12 02:09 AM


No lance, hope is an amazing thing to possess . . .
nice job
xxoo

Endlessecho
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since 2003-09-05
Posts 398
I live within myself
4 posted 2003-09-12 08:10 AM


well-written. great expressions.  Keep hope!  :-)
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