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Dark Poetry #3

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Starsfalling
Member

since 2003-03-18

Posts 94
some where deep in the shadows

0 posted 2003-09-11 08:48 PM

Show me
The way to redemption
Freeing me from this sinful burden
Dragging my feet
I search for the one to forgive me
She hides from me
Forever I shall wander
And yet never once glimpse her
To do so with a smile
Is all I can hope

i lost my musical inspiration so if the ending is kinda dead you know why... but oh well i liked it

-lance

There is no peace among the stars, only an eternity of carnage and slaughter and the laughter of thirsting gods

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

1 posted 2003-09-11 09:48 PM

I like the end actually. It's hopeful. I like your style its pleasent to the eyes. Good job here Lance.
~Lex

[This message has been edited by Lexy (09-11-2003 09:49 PM).]

Starsfalling
Member

since 2003-03-18

Posts 94
some where deep in the shadows

2 posted 2003-09-11 10:52 PM

:-D thank you very much

There is no peace among the stars, only an eternity of carnage and slaughter and the laughter of thirsting gods

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

3 posted 2003-09-12 02:09 AM

No lance, hope is an amazing thing to possess . . .
nice job
xxoo

Endlessecho
Member

since 2003-09-05

Posts 398
I live within myself

4 posted 2003-09-12 08:10 AM

well-written. great expressions. Keep hope! :-)

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