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green_itchy_stuff
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New Caney, Tx

0 posted 2003-09-09 01:33 AM



Pretend always great
Fake
Obvious
Snare I decide

Make the gap wider
Full of empty souls

Obituary list
Of obsolete
Teattered and determined

Simple game of contact
Paranormal paradox
Something rattled orthodox

Make the gap wider
Full of empty souls

Decency obscene
Medium commitment
Purchase for some cash

Illegal freedom
Tied to desire
Hatch and their violent

Open up the gates
Reign of terror

Fine glow of fire
Smolder
Punishment
Captured haze

Banging for liberty
Concealed from the sky

Rupture and disaster
Feel it in the grin
Filthy teeth
Childs play

No mass restructured order
Council fallen

Hussssshhhh

a trickle of music from a well
let it spill and roar like hell!

{Lord knows Im a VOODOO CHILD}-JIMI

© Copyright 2003 Kenneth Craig Rogers - All Rights Reserved
blackhalo
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since 2000-02-15
Posts 467
Denver, CO
1 posted 2003-09-09 02:06 AM


"Paranormal paradox
Something rattled orthodox

Make the gap wider
Full of empty souls

Decency obscene"

Gripped me with some obscene fear for some reason....  Why in the world I don't know, but you made me paranoid with this piece.  :confused:  Anyway, great read, I enjoyed it, as always.
~Alicia

teenpoet
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since 2001-10-17
Posts 280
Michigan
2 posted 2003-09-09 02:52 PM


I love your words.  And you use a lot of big words too. Congrats for you.  And I agree with Alicia.

Let go of your concept of reality and try mine for a while...then we'll see how long you last.

Lexy
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since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California
3 posted 2003-09-09 08:22 PM


Nice piece here Craig, I don't mean to be annoying or seem ignorant, but could you explain to me what exactly this poem means. I'm a liitle lost, sorry.

"Decency obscene
Medium commitment
Purchase for some cash"

irony. very nice, possibly my favorite part.

~Lex

Maddy vanD
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since 2003-09-06
Posts 99
Newfoundland, Canada
4 posted 2003-09-10 09:03 AM


I'm afraid I must agree, I too am lost here, the words are evocative, but I can suss out no actual meaning....sorry.

Maddy
Poetry is not pretty....poetry is real

green_itchy_stuff
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New Caney, Tx
5 posted 2003-09-10 02:37 PM


Thanx Alicia and teenpoet.
green_itchy_stuff
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6 posted 2003-09-10 02:42 PM


Thanx Lexy and Mad,
This is basically about at first being accidental, but wrong becoming right and the refusal of its correction.  The biblical punishment, change in the base of morality, and the "fall" this will cause.  Husshhhh

a trickle of music from a well
let it spill and roar like hell!

{Lord knows Im a VOODOO CHILD}-JIMI

ShannonMarie
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since 2003-09-09
Posts 55
in a state of being
7 posted 2003-09-10 10:32 PM


what I got out of it was the fall of all that was once held to be right and moral.  I thought it was very good.
eor
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since 2002-09-26
Posts 959
blues & greys
8 posted 2003-09-10 11:27 PM


i understand this one completly, riviting baby, great write...adding this

"There never was a genius without a tincture of madness."

green_itchy_stuff
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since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx
9 posted 2003-09-11 12:39 PM


thanx Shannon, thats pretty much what I had intented to say.

And eor, damn dude, hell yeah.

GIS

a trickle of music from a well
let it spill and roar like hell!

{Lord knows Im a VOODOO CHILD}-JIMI

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