Dark Poetry #3 |
Conception |
green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
Pretend always great Fake Obvious Snare I decide Make the gap wider Full of empty souls Obituary list Of obsolete Teattered and determined Simple game of contact Paranormal paradox Something rattled orthodox Make the gap wider Full of empty souls Decency obscene Medium commitment Purchase for some cash Illegal freedom Tied to desire Hatch and their violent Open up the gates Reign of terror Fine glow of fire Smolder Punishment Captured haze Banging for liberty Concealed from the sky Rupture and disaster Feel it in the grin Filthy teeth Childs play No mass restructured order Council fallen Hussssshhhh a trickle of music from a well |
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blackhalo Member
since 2000-02-15
Posts 467Denver, CO |
"Paranormal paradox Something rattled orthodox Make the gap wider Full of empty souls Decency obscene" Gripped me with some obscene fear for some reason.... Why in the world I don't know, but you made me paranoid with this piece. :confused: Anyway, great read, I enjoyed it, as always. ~Alicia |
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teenpoet Member
since 2001-10-17
Posts 280Michigan |
I love your words. And you use a lot of big words too. Congrats for you. And I agree with Alicia. Let go of your concept of reality and try mine for a while...then we'll see how long you last. |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
Nice piece here Craig, I don't mean to be annoying or seem ignorant, but could you explain to me what exactly this poem means. I'm a liitle lost, sorry. "Decency obscene Medium commitment Purchase for some cash" irony. very nice, possibly my favorite part. ~Lex |
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Maddy vanD Member
since 2003-09-06
Posts 99Newfoundland, Canada |
I'm afraid I must agree, I too am lost here, the words are evocative, but I can suss out no actual meaning....sorry. Maddy |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
Thanx Alicia and teenpoet. |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
Thanx Lexy and Mad, This is basically about at first being accidental, but wrong becoming right and the refusal of its correction. The biblical punishment, change in the base of morality, and the "fall" this will cause. Husshhhh a trickle of music from a well |
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ShannonMarie Member
since 2003-09-09
Posts 55in a state of being |
what I got out of it was the fall of all that was once held to be right and moral. I thought it was very good. |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
i understand this one completly, riviting baby, great write...adding this "There never was a genius without a tincture of madness." |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
thanx Shannon, thats pretty much what I had intented to say. And eor, damn dude, hell yeah. GIS a trickle of music from a well |
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