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green_itchy_stuff
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since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

0 posted 2003-09-06 03:55 AM



Tantalizing view indeed
Conscious of a hard sleep
Sitcky mouth and fowl taste
Stained pillow collection of saliva

This site confuses me
Baffelled beyond influence
Suggestive, an idea
Clue despair void

Thin broken dark space
Graphic error
Real, firm, lines

Paranoia

Cycle of day and night
Nervously return to sleep
Haunting lack there of

Blarring noise
Dim lights
Black curtains provide nothing
Alone stands the white light

Escape and construct order
This hole in reality widens
Swallow
Natural unafraid

a trickle of music from a well
let it spill and roar like hell!

{Lord knows Im a VOODOO CHILD}-JIMI

© Copyright 2003 Kenneth Craig Rogers - All Rights Reserved
Jeremiah Johnson
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
1 posted 2003-09-06 06:36 AM


thsi is a great poem the image it creates is remarkable. i can't wait to be able to read more of your work. but in the mean time keep up the writing.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


SharaRose
Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501
Somewhere out there~
2 posted 2003-09-06 11:47 AM


Itchy..probably nothing a BIG hug and a lot of true LOVE wouldn't fix, or change. Sometimes people also put up a hard shell to keep their feelings inside...so it's a love thing, and it's out there!!! Love is always a force out there!!!!!! Seems like you could use a


SharaRose @-->--

Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer!

Lexy
Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California
3 posted 2003-09-06 02:22 PM


Blarring noise
Dim lights
Black curtains provide nothing
Alone stands the white light

I liked the image this painted. I like how you don't write in full sentences. Its like you write exactly what comes to mind. Sinpits cut out of your mind and glued to the page. nicely done..reluctant to say, I know what you mean.
~Lex  

[This message has been edited by Lexy (09-06-2003 02:23 PM).]

Kethry
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
4 posted 2003-09-06 06:27 PM


Dark have been your dreams of late as the outer shell cracks and the inner self flows forth.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



littlewing
Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
5 posted 2003-09-07 10:18 AM


Craig, mann I know this so so swell
love the
Sitcky mouth and fowl taste
Stained pillow collection of saliva
xxoo


green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx
6 posted 2003-09-07 09:45 PM


WOW!  The responces to this piece were awesome.

Jeremiah- Thanx.  I will.

Shara- this isnt really about a heartbreak.  Actually its about one morning I woke up and I saw this bright, thick, line of white light and I couldnt figure out what it was.  So I kept looking around to see if I could find the source and I couldnt.  I eventually figured out the door was cracked a little bit and I was seeing a glow from the living room.  It was just a weird experience because I wasnt able to find the source at first.

Lexy- Thanx.  I guess its just the style I prefer to use.  Paranoia of the unknown is pretty strange at times.

Kethery- reply to a poem with part of a poem.  Thats clever.

littlewing- Thanx.  a compliment like that from you is great.

Hey everybody, read the thick part of the response Shara.  It tells what this poem is about.  THanx again.

a trickle of music from a well
let it spill and roar like hell!

{Lord knows Im a VOODOO CHILD}-JIMI

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