Dark Poetry #3 |
Hard Solid White |
green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
Tantalizing view indeed Conscious of a hard sleep Sitcky mouth and fowl taste Stained pillow collection of saliva This site confuses me Baffelled beyond influence Suggestive, an idea Clue despair void Thin broken dark space Graphic error Real, firm, lines Paranoia Cycle of day and night Nervously return to sleep Haunting lack there of Blarring noise Dim lights Black curtains provide nothing Alone stands the white light Escape and construct order This hole in reality widens Swallow Natural unafraid a trickle of music from a well |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
thsi is a great poem the image it creates is remarkable. i can't wait to be able to read more of your work. but in the mean time keep up the writing. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
Itchy..probably nothing a BIG hug and a lot of true LOVE wouldn't fix, or change. Sometimes people also put up a hard shell to keep their feelings inside...so it's a love thing, and it's out there!!! Love is always a force out there!!!!!! Seems like you could use a SharaRose @-->-- Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer! |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
Blarring noise Dim lights Black curtains provide nothing Alone stands the white light I liked the image this painted. I like how you don't write in full sentences. Its like you write exactly what comes to mind. Sinpits cut out of your mind and glued to the page. nicely done..reluctant to say, I know what you mean. ~Lex [This message has been edited by Lexy (09-06-2003 02:23 PM).] |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Dark have been your dreams of late as the outer shell cracks and the inner self flows forth. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Craig, mann I know this so so swell love the Sitcky mouth and fowl taste Stained pillow collection of saliva xxoo |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
WOW! The responces to this piece were awesome. Jeremiah- Thanx. I will. Shara- this isnt really about a heartbreak. Actually its about one morning I woke up and I saw this bright, thick, line of white light and I couldnt figure out what it was. So I kept looking around to see if I could find the source and I couldnt. I eventually figured out the door was cracked a little bit and I was seeing a glow from the living room. It was just a weird experience because I wasnt able to find the source at first. Lexy- Thanx. I guess its just the style I prefer to use. Paranoia of the unknown is pretty strange at times. Kethery- reply to a poem with part of a poem. Thats clever. littlewing- Thanx. a compliment like that from you is great. Hey everybody, read the thick part of the response Shara. It tells what this poem is about. THanx again. a trickle of music from a well |
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