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Starsfalling
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since 2003-03-18
Posts 94
some where deep in the shadows

0 posted 2003-09-03 11:38 PM



Lost
And forgotten
No one shall no
No one shall remember
To thee
There is no me
Gone from life
Without a tear shed


this ones real short so i might come back and add to it but tell me what you think
-lance

There is no peace among the stars, only an eternity of carnage and slaughter and the laughter of thirsting gods

© Copyright 2003 Lance Keber - All Rights Reserved
Mad_Hatter
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since 2003-06-29
Posts 393
Canada
1 posted 2003-09-04 01:02 AM


Leave it, it's touched me and it's very nicely done.
ShadowRaven
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since 2003-08-13
Posts 51

2 posted 2003-09-04 01:47 AM


I agree - leave it. I am reading this after finding out that someone I care a great deal about has just found out that his bestfriend has died. This brought a tear to my eye.

I think it is beautiful the way it is.

Starsfalling
Member
since 2003-03-18
Posts 94
some where deep in the shadows
3 posted 2003-09-04 02:23 PM


thank you alright i will leave it how it is
im really sorry for your friend

There is no peace among the stars, only an eternity of carnage and slaughter and the laughter of thirsting gods

littlewing
Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
4 posted 2003-09-04 10:40 PM


Lance
is perfect as it is
nice write
xxoo

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