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Plastic People |
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Tequilia_Sunrise Senior Member
since 2003-02-19
Posts 612Lochalsh, Ontario, Canada 
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Plastic People Live next door They are your friends That you assume you know Thet speak with plastic lips And lie with plastic tounges Their plastic mask Covers their plastic face That we shall never see A plastic brain In a plastic skull Is put to use only to cunjugate themselves Dont worry thought Their plastic is sure to soon decay And all the plastic people will fade Leaving only their plastic bodies To pollute our earth As they did before they left |
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mysticpoe Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883 |
This really good, God, I enjoyed this. This goes back, but never seems to go out of style. Nice job. mysticpoe If nothing is something |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Amanda, yes well I have just done a bit of "recycling" myself LOL nice write xxoo |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
Wow does this ever take me back. When I was 16 I told my mother all these people were plastic people, and I will never forget the look on her face. She looked at me in surprise and said yeah you are right. Kind of monumental for her, and I. Thanks for bringing back the memories.  SharaRose @-->-- Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer! |
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Mad_Hatter Member
since 2003-06-29
Posts 393Canada |
OH wow, this poem is amazing. The plastic people. I don't know how many times I have felt like all these people around me were just plastic, carbon copies of eachother. Wonderful write. |
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somethinginyoursocks Junior Member
since 2003-03-27
Posts 28IN, the U.S. of A. |
Yes, very interesting write. Even though the subject matter was trite, it still kept my attention. Kudos for you! The trick about writing trite subjects and cliches is to write it in a new way. The fact that you made the word "plastic" repetitive made it sound more interesting and meaningful. Next, if I were you, I'd play around with the imagery and texture. Try to describe how the plastic sounds (call it a plastic sound?) or how it feels (maybe go off-subject a bit and say wax?) and how little movement actual plastic figures have, which allows you to show how constructed the plastic people are. These are just a few suggestions because you really have some potential in the way you write! -I don't need a signature- |
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Tequilia_Sunrise Senior Member
since 2003-02-19
Posts 612Lochalsh, Ontario, Canada |
thankx everyone for your lovely comments  |
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