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Lonely Shadow
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since 2000-03-14
Posts 128
Virginia

0 posted 2003-08-20 10:32 AM


Slowly losing my sanity
As nightmares given life
Blind me to the truths of old
Angels come to calm the rage
But even in moments of peace
Screams of agony pierce
the thunderous silence
darkness falling deeper now
into the very depths of my soul
my spirit once so colorful
now awash with endless black
on the surface so pale
but slowly washing over red
blades like silver brushes
painting pictures of true pain
black rainbows, hues of gray
my world lifeless and worn
my life shattered and torn
on the edge between life and death
regret and remembrance
trying to find any sign of hope
upon the edge of a knife
only silence in the dark depths
no salvation for the sorrowed
only regret in the confines of hell

Fear destroys the mind, depression destroys the soul... only love and compassion may save you from death.

© Copyright 2003 Lonely Shadow - All Rights Reserved
blackhalo
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since 2000-02-15
Posts 467
Denver, CO
1 posted 2003-08-20 01:36 PM


Your use of imagery in this piece is almost astounding!  I love the colors, I think they paint the perfect picture of what you were trying to portray here...

"my spirit once so colorful
now awash with endless black
on the surface so pale
but slowly washing over red
blades like silver brushes
painting pictures of true pain
black rainbows, hues of gray"

  Great write, much enjoyed!
~Alicia

Paragon
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since 2003-02-16
Posts 114

2 posted 2003-08-20 06:55 PM


This is a very vivid and somber poem, I think the imagery was well portrayed and the vocabulary used in the poem was also well chosen. All in all, great write

from the newbie poet,
Paragon

mysticpoe
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since 2003-02-28
Posts 883

3 posted 2003-08-21 09:40 AM


I always felt that the direction of ones thought w/most poems, lies w/the few, first/last lines. Nice write

mysticpoe

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

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