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symphony_of_thoughts Member
since 2003-08-03
Posts 95Somewhere |
Reel me in Make me want this sin No other wandering thoughts Only these sinful soughts Thoughts whirling untamed Maybe I should be shamed Making me feel so free Bloody eyes cannot see |
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Tequilia_Sunrise Senior Member
since 2003-02-19
Posts 612Lochalsh, Ontario, Canada |
I enjoyed this was very differnt, making me think. |
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blackhalo Member
since 2000-02-15
Posts 467Denver, CO |
Different, and it truly made me think. Superb. Thanks for sharing! ~A LOL! I just read the other reply... Guess I should read those first?  [This message has been edited by blackhalo (08-12-2003 06:49 PM).] |
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Lexia Member
since 2003-07-20
Posts 111Nowhere |
Interestingly different. Very thought provoing, indeed. Great write, Lex You may only be one person to the world, but you may also be the world to one person. |
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symphony_of_thoughts Member
since 2003-08-03
Posts 95Somewhere |
Thanks for the feedback. For whats it's worth, this is what the main concept of the poem was. It is about when people sometimes have uncontrollable criminal thoughts in their head. Like what usually happens with school shootings, where kids will get teased and they can't get the thoughts tamed so they go shoot the school up. It is terrible that they get bullied, but the kids who do this are only going to ruin their life more. And finally, the last line of the poem, "Bloody eyes cannot see", means that these people can't see through all the hate and worries and their blind to stopping themself. [This message has been edited by symphony_of_thoughts (08-12-2003 09:17 PM).] |
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