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green_itchy_stuff
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0 posted 2003-08-12 12:03 PM



May I, May I
Have a drink
Simple water in my throat

Just and wrong
Hand in hand
Minor infraction
Hand to hand

Blackened white line
And shady spots
Pull some strings

Mounted ready for what it will
Pin straight explode around
Conquest march of gold
A defeating kind of road

Gentle spring of crimson blood
Spills and poors in alley ruts
Disease of greed in rampant strut

Politics and fingers crossed
Phony papers treaty lost
Blacked and whitened
Ammended cost

Psychos rage infant hault
Sworn and bought infantry
A little, more control them all
Enter on eternity

War and death at fair price
Sons and brothers do the deeds

May I, May I  
All is said
On command
We won and bled

____________________________________________
I havent shipped out yet.  Im just feeling a little military tonight.

a trickle of music from a well
let it spill and roar like hell!

{Lord knows Im a VOODOO CHILD}-JIMI

© Copyright 2003 Kenneth Craig Rogers - All Rights Reserved
mysticpoe
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1 posted 2003-08-12 09:36 AM


May I, May I, the flagship of your poem. I liked it. Nice write.

mysticpoe

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

Lexia
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2 posted 2003-08-12 10:13 AM


Interesting. I liked it.

Lexia

You may only be one person to the world, but you may also be the world to one person.

green_itchy_stuff
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3 posted 2003-08-12 04:19 PM


thanx guys.

GIS

blackhalo
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4 posted 2003-08-12 05:07 PM


Very interesting indeed.  So political, and yet, still poetry.  What a feat!     I much enjoyed this piece.  Thanks for sharing.
~Alicia~

Kaoru
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5 posted 2003-08-12 05:18 PM


I have no idea what to say..

twas good.

green_itchy_stuff
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6 posted 2003-08-12 11:06 PM


Thanx guys.  Im glad you found it entertaining.  
GIS

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