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In my scars
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In my scars |
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Eromyna Member
since 2002-11-29
Posts 306Pheonix, AZ, USA 
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My pulse is in my scars skin so perfectly marred pain so exsquisitly carved that my nightmares call it art The voices are applauding me with all their personalities My fingers trace the marks complementing my insanity I told you I was losing something so try to continue smiling Not so easy when you're watching me bleed now that you've taken the last thing I need I'm laughing out loud like you did before crying my misery onto the floor You're too afraid to look at me too stunned to speak as you lock the door So this is what you broke me for "I don't need to scream for you to deem me aggravation." [This message has been edited by Eromyna (07-30-2003 12:15 AM).] |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
This is a very nice write, Shay At first blush, one could think that it has "cutting" references in it. But, it doesn't, does it? Cause, it would probably get moderated into oblivion if it did. So, I'll say that I like the way you use scarring metaphorically. Done in a way that everyone can relate to. ~wranx [This message has been edited by wranx (07-30-2003 10:35 PM).] |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
"I told you I was losing something so try to continue smiling Not so easy when you're watching me bleed now that you've taken the last thing I need" -loved this stanza, fantastic write... "in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums" |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
And little Alexis doesn't feel so alone in her grief. wow...the first stanza was amazing. I can't thank you enough for sharing this. ~Lex..  |
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Eromyna Member
since 2002-11-29
Posts 306Pheonix, AZ, USA |
If someone liked it, then it was worth writing. Thank you for giving me that satisfaction. "I don't need to scream for you to deem me aggravation." |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
-------------------------------------------------------------------------------- My pulse is in my scars skin so perfectly marred pain so exsquisitly carved that my nightmares call it art ------------- Beautiful yes I think everyone can indeed relate to this at one point or another. |
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