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Gabkicks Junior Member
since 2003-06-04
Posts 13 |
He wants a sense of purpose A reason to live Something to get up for something worthy to give He wants a sense of self-value Remembering mystakes he wont repeat To feel the so callled vigor of youth To feel more than utter defeat. To fight back thoughts of hopelessness How he feels so incomplete when life tastes so bitter, death smells so sweet (what do u think.. i know it's repetitive) |
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Silent Evincar Member
since 2003-07-22
Posts 179Here There and Places Between |
Not repetitive, constructive. Everything is bearing to strong and sometimes you need something to hold onto. One thing rings true to this peice though...strength. NJS |
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mysticpoe Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883 |
The poem has substance, value. You did a good job writing it and I enjoyed it. Nice write. mysticpoe If nothing is something |
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Eromyna Member
since 2002-11-29
Posts 306Pheonix, AZ, USA |
It's only repetitive to a sensible degree. It gives it rythm. I love this piece. "I don't need to scream for you to deem me aggravation." |
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