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Why?(my sorta view)
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Why?(my sorta view) |
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nobody Junior Member
since 2003-05-19
Posts 43 |
some people write about life or death whats the point,theyre the facts of our existance some just it in hospital,collecting sadness when they could get the joy of the people they love a girl lies in a darkened room,holding the knife to her wrist all because she feels her lifes gone to waste the tramp begging on the street,tryin to keep alive food is the biggest worry of their existence an old woman lies dying,having lived her life to the full but it was a waste and she nos it she waits for her chariot to come,to take her up hi but nothing comes,and as her soul dies she retreats into the blackness of death to join everyone else in their clouded illusions _________________ what do you think?? [This message has been edited by Nan (06-24-2003 07:44 AM).] |
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laurie Member
since 2003-05-28
Posts 153canada, ontario |
l think some people write about death and all that mainly to understand it, or make people think about it, but something l noticed in your poem was that you seemed to be asking a side question, along the lines of why do we bother trying... well, l agree with you there, l don't understand why we try so hard sometimes, but sometimes its all you can do... as for the poem, l liked it, though it was a little abrupt or something. anyway, good write. laurie. |
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topsyturveychick Member
since 2003-01-19
Posts 57Bris,QLD,Aus |
Loved it. I like the hidden meaning/question that it hides. Great work. I asked God how much he loved me... |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
we all ask why, and we all ask why try, but wiht out some sembalance of happiness there could not be sadness, so keep on keepin on... |
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