Dark Poetry #3 |
Beauty Cloaked In Darkness |
EternityofChaos New Member
since 2003-06-16
Posts 1MN, U.S.A. |
Hey this is Paxia, but I couldn't get into that account, so I had to make a new one. So yeah, this is my second poem. Any god would cry, to see you die His angel go unknown For the cruelty that stays preserved Lie forever written in stone A flower blossoms, so beautiful But only in the dead of night No one to gaze upon it For it cannot stand the light A shot rings out, but no one hears No one is around For though in truth the gun was shot To the outside it made no sound Just like you're screaming out loud but no one knows Or even cares to try No one knows to save you And all you want is to die The sweetest, ripest grapes we sow To make a wine we can never taste And your god would surely shed tears to know That your beauty had been laid to waste Beauty shrouded in darkness Is the beauty that shall never be seen The cloak of night shall hide her glory And ever keep her in hellish dreams Beauty so young and fragile Only struggling to reach out to the sun But darkness calls out to prey on her innocence And the night has once again won Few will ever remember Few will ever know Through the darknes that's claimed you, no one will see The beauty you have to show You hide your face behind the shadows Keep the cloak so tight around you You find your refuge in hiding In the dark abyss surrounding you You carry your scars and regrets AS you fly off into the night And hide from the world all that you are As on wings of escape you take flight But beauty, can't you see? There's nothing for you to hide! It isn't right that you should suffer And harbor so much hurt inside You shouldn't be denied the very light That you have spent your life reaching out for YOu were never meant to be a creature of the night Cursed to fear the day forevermore I wish there was aught I could do To keep the darkness at bay But I can do nothing, I have no power To wish all this pain away I can only but watch As the night takes away all your joy And I am powerless to help As your hope it continues to destroy If only I could preserve your beauty So it wouldn't go to naught But like you said, winter always comes And the rose must succumb to the frost And I wish I could save you from the night Carry you away to the day But the darkness is too strong, I know And so there forever you stay All I can do is be here to witness Your fall from the Tower of Faith And cry as you land, sad and broken YOur beauty a disappointing waste And as your body lay still Beneath a sky with no stars I shall be among the few to weep Who will truly know how beautiful you are. |
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laurie Member
since 2003-05-28
Posts 153canada, ontario |
lf l could, l'd tell you what to change in this, but honestly, l can't think of much of anything that needs to be fixed... your rhyming meter sounds a little forced in one of the first stanzas', but... even thats not too bad. well written, and... well, wow. laurie. |
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