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Who Will Be My Saviour?
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Who Will Be My Saviour? |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia 
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I had a troubled childhood I often fought with Mum and Dad But it is only now I realise Just exactly what I had I ran away from home At the tender age of ten And within about a year I'd been abused by many men Other street kids gave me pills They said to take away the pain But at night I could not sleep My inner demons would remain Now I'm hooked on heroin And I walk the streets at night I'm so alone and so confused Sometimes I'm as high as a kite I don't remember much of anything And have no memory of their face When they use me and abuse me I lose all dignity and grace From my dark and grimy room I hear the chiming of a bell I wonder who will be my saviour Who'll save me from this living hell? * * * * I should point out that this was not written from personal experience. |
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qtpieelmo Senior Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 989Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY |
WoW!! Great words here & I'm glad to hear it's not from personal experience!!   ELMO "No man is EVER worth my tears, and the one who is, will never make me cry!" |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
This is really good, Sue. Unfortunately, too many of our children are out there....thanks for the reminder. ~K~ |
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just a junkie Member
since 2003-03-04
Posts 53 |
You sound like you know what you are talking about - You had me fooled!! Great grasp on something of which you are not personally familiar with. Just a Junkie |
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Trillium 
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Sue: A tragic story and you told it so well! Betty Lou Hebert |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
If just one caring person comes into someones life it can work miracles...James |
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stupefied Junior Member
since 2003-04-26
Posts 12dead america |
that was great. often poems that ryme sound really unconnected but you did a wonderful job with this one. it's amazing how you can describe something so tragic and sad and yet not make it sound completely disgusting. well all in all it was beautiful. keep writing. "sticks and stones are hard on bones aimed with angry art...words can sting like anything but silence...SILENCE BREAKS THE HEART... |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
I am so very grateful for your comments. I find it a challenge to try and step inside another's shoes to see how life is for them. Take care......Sue I am in motion |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Hi Sue, this is a very powerful reminder of the number of children who are roaming the streets and in trouble. Somehow society has to realize that children are a precious gift and we need to be there for them offering love and protection. Not all adults are not meant to be parents. There should be safe houses where these kids can go. They should not be on the streets hooking and doing drugs. Thank you for writing this. Hugs, Marti Few are those who see with their own eyes and feel with their own hearts. A.Einstein |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I am glad I have never been in those shoes, Sue. But then I am sometimes overly cautious with my life. Hugs Maureen |
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quatro Member
since 2003-04-29
Posts 392Galveston, Texas |
Sue, Great work at stepping outside yourself and experience the pain and struggle of another. Nicely done. Best, Naome |
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