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NC Member
since 2001-02-20
Posts 89 |
while we were in confessionals lying about sins father sat on the stoop drinking can after can of control swallowing faith remembering... the laying on of hands |
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Swamp¤Faeryie Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 393fairyland....of course;) |
i found this to be very powerful,to the point of cringes,cold chills,and nausea,kind of like a tori amos song that makes you sick. well anyways,deserves recognition,you wrote it well!! sammi¤ i am kinsman to the animals,my body is part of the soil and the trees are my sisters.~halifax wilde |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
swallowing faith remembering Three words to say so much...FANTASTIC |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
Well written. Sad though that anyone should have to endure this kind of ordeal. I wish you true healing. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
definitely well written. And is it all insubstantial as holy water, I wonder.  K...and I have found a lifetime can be lived in one moment... |
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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
Very powerful, indeed. Great write. With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free.. dragonpoe |
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Verve Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 348Singapore |
Impressive work.  |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
This moved me very much. Even though short, it conveyed a lot... I liked the style. Take care ~ Tara ~ may you live all the days of your life. -- jonathan swift |
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Panne415 Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 104San Antonio |
NC- THIS IS ABSOLUTELY wonderful! The 'lying about our sins' the drinking control the the laying of hands - all perfect - all painting a true and timeless scene - any Catholic could definitely see-feel - be this piece. Powerful images, stated just right, no waste of words - Perfect - IMHO. I was looking for D'poes work and the title brought me in here on a search for her works- AND I am so glad I found this. Thank you - brought back memories of mass confessions where the whole school walked the few blocks together to the church for the Easter confessions with the nuns leading the pack - many smiles. However, your work here - all my memories aside - is RIGHT ON! Thanks, Panne |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Perfectly penned with vivid images. Write on Kethry. Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
It's as though you took the memory and made truth of it. I have often wondered similar - what do Fathers, or priests want for themselves? The eternal happy ever after is a lifetime away, in the meantime they must have some personal gratification - which is what? Where they excell spiritually or even darker thoughts? Wonderful, thought provoking piece here hon! Isis *War produces one thing - Cemetaries. And in cemetaries there are no enemies!* |
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