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Reflections of the Hunter (reworked repost from the olden days)
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Reflections of the Hunter (reworked repost from the olden days) |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA 
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I shot you last night. Ceased your life in a flash of death I gorged myself on your flesh taking all I wanted and leaving waste. The slaughter I reveled in was in vain for the most part. I was not hungry, nor in need I merely wanted to end you quickly. I sat down today and reflected on the violence of my act my hand reaching like a bullet my words butchering your soul unknowing. As I thought of my failure to be the man you so deserve I prayed for the strength the true strength to fix it finally. I know my quest for your joy will hurt you just a little as you are faced with my trash I leave behind with this final bullet. Aegri somnia Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn. |
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Fariegirl Member
since 2003-02-05
Posts 147 |
good poem. if you have not already heard i would love for my work to be seen anywere. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh JP, I think we all go through this phase in life, dearest friend, at first we have no clue what love is and so we desire being the hunter and claim we can fire like a skilled cupid but we only make a murder of a heart, then through the grief the realization is made and through ones mistake the lesson is learned and the bullet can hurt ones mind even more! (sad sigh) I'm glad this is from the past, sweet friend, I send many angel hugs your way and my proud vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet JP, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
powerful! made me hold my breath and grab hold of my chair.. looking around me. Enjoyed though! Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
WOW~great work. |
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SPIRIT Senior Member
since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745California Desert |
I love Dark Poetry that I can read and understand. This is dark, I understood it and I voted. I be me BUT who does me be? |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
There's nothing mixed about this metaphor, JP. It's powerful, and says a ton about remorse and second chances. |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Hi JP, you hit me bang! from the first stanza and captured my attention all the way through....appreciated how this write gradually grew softer towards the end... would love to see this in the book  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Fantastic piece of work JP! ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Intense, yet effectual writing here in this poem. Definately worthy of reflections. Sometimes we have to follow a stronger voice, even if it's silent. |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Almost missed this one, it's great. Titia Like scattered leaves...my words will flow |
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SPIRIT Senior Member
since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745California Desert |
Just a little bump to the top. |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Intense, Dark, and great!!!!! Wow!!! Bridgette  "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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carol Senior Member
since 2003-01-25
Posts 624Florida USA |
JP, very god its got my vote |
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Barbara Trautman Member
since 2002-10-23
Posts 90 |
Scary!!! Barbara Trautman |
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IcyFlamez89 Member
since 2003-02-14
Posts 292Jersey City NJ |
....Jeez u noe u got my vote, luv da force of the poem I am the result of a typical dysfuctional family |
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IcyFlamez89 Member
since 2003-02-14
Posts 292Jersey City NJ |
Just had 2 give this anotha one, lol. |
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Fariegirl Member
since 2003-02-05
Posts 147 |
good, I found the way out, but i will not show you the light if you are at home in the darkness. |
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Purple Poet On Wheels Member
since 2002-06-21
Posts 145Pittsburgh/Edinboro, PA |
wow...i'm blown away |
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