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LunaSoleil
New Member
since 2003-02-20
Posts 1
Germany

0 posted 2003-02-20 05:19 AM


I wrote this some time ago, let me know what you think.thanx.


DARK ROOMS
empty
no light
no energy
DARK ROOMS
locked doors
on both sides
no escaping
DARK ROOMS
me
being inside
DARK ROOMS
hearing life
behind the doors
trying to open
DARK ROOMS
my hands are sore
my body hurts
I wanna feel life
DARK ROOMS
light
somebodys unlocking
DARK ROOMS
energy
life
is coming back into me
I feel safe and warm
DEATH...
I live
finally

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Jason Lyle
Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438
With my darkling
1 posted 2003-02-20 05:29 AM


Welcome to the forums,nice first write.
Jason

majnu
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Senior Member
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088
SF Bay Area
2 posted 2003-02-24 01:51 AM


Luna,
  Welcome to the Passions In Poetry family. This debut piece of yours is moving - extremely dark but moving; I look forward to reading more of your poetry in the future.

  I feel sure you will find no dark rooms here, only rooms full of poetry, thought, and life.

  Please be sure to check your e-mail, there should be a special surprise for you there.

-majnu
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Timid thoughts be not afraid. I am a Poet.

Justbleu
Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329
Oregon, Originally From Alaska :)
3 posted 2003-02-26 06:45 PM


Wonderfully dark poem....excellent choice for your first post!!!!

Welcome to Passions!!!!!
Hope you enjoy it here!!!!!

Bridgette

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again.  To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Andre Brink


Dark Kisses
Member
since 2001-06-24
Posts 364
Flat lands of Kansas
4 posted 2003-02-27 10:16 PM


Welcome to Dark Passions!!

Nice first post.  I hope to read more soon!!

~Dark~

A friend, like a candle, is most needed in the darkness.

JP
Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343
Loomis, CA
5 posted 2003-03-03 12:12 PM


reminds me of my daze in prison....

very well done, and welcome.

Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn.
Nil Desperandum, Fata viem invenient

SPIRIT
Senior Member
since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745
California Desert
6 posted 2003-03-03 09:42 AM


Excellent write


gpc
Junior Member
since 2003-03-01
Posts 43

7 posted 2003-03-05 01:52 PM


oh yes, i absoloutely love this. finally someone who writes with a similar style as me. a very powerful isolationist piece. almost scary. keep it up!

GPC

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