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Wreck of Man
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Wreck of Man |
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lestat New Member
since 2003-01-04
Posts 2 |
What skeletal wreck of man this is Transluscent flesh and feeble bones The kinda temple where whores and villians try to temp the holistic tones Running ramped with free thought to free form to the free and clear And the matters at hand shelled out like lint at a laundry mat to shift and focus on the bigger and better now We all have a little sin that needs venting,virtues for the rending of laws and systems and stems of rift and the branches of office do you know what your post intels Do you serve a purpose or purposely serve Wind down inside your lore The value of a summer spent and a winter earned For the rest of us there is always sunday The day of the week the reeks of rest but all we do is catch our breath so we can wade naked in the bloody pool and place our hand on the big black book Wind down inside your lore The value of a summer spent and a winter earned For the rest of us there is always sunday The day of the week the reeks of rest but all we do is catch our breath so we can wade naked in the bloody pool and place our hand on the big black book To watch the knife zigzag between our aching fingers A vaction is a countdown t-minus your life and counting time to drag you tongue against the sugar cube and hope you get a taste Rember your a wreck an accident Forget the freak your just nature Keep the gun oiled and the temple clean **** ,snort and blasphomey Let the heads cool and the engines run Because in the end everything we do is just everything we've done |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
umm.. not sure what to say... WoW, a powerful write! Welcome to the Blue Pages, I hope you have a good time here and sit back, relax and take your shoes off! (unless your socks are too smelly)  Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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Eromyna Member
since 2002-11-29
Posts 306Pheonix, AZ, USA |
I admire your wordplay, but I wasn't always sure what you were getting at. My favorite lines were the ones that went: "The day of the week the reeks of rest but all we do is catch our breath so we can wade naked in the bloody pool and place our hand on the big black book Wind down inside your lore" |
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lestat New Member
since 2003-01-04
Posts 2 |
Thank you for the replies will try to post more some more clear and some more vauge is i like em ) thanks again. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
lestat, very dark but powerful images. However punctuation would help understanding. Loved the refrain! Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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SPIRIT Senior Member
since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745California Desert |
"Do you serve a purpose or purposely serve" "Because in the end everything we do is just everything we've done" I liked these two lines very well, jump right to the point and immediately understandable to 'old folks' like me. The man is a wreck indeed. Very dark and forceful. You probably quite enjoyed "ranting" away on this one. Interesting read. Thank you. I am an enigma, even unto myself. |
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