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rm711
Member

since 2002-11-30

Posts 131
Wiltshire, England

0 posted 2002-12-01 05:35 AM

Right from that day
When you ripped my dream away
There’s been a hope gone
That I could ever succeed
It’s not that I don’t love your talent
And I swear it’s not jealousy
But I feel betrayed
And you have cast a shadow on my smile.

I feel like a failure
To everyone and myself
To the cold days and the better days
I never appreciated
I feel bad for you
That I’m part of your life
If I could I’d apologise and walk away
I wish I could for you
I know how happy it would make you
But this damaged world has force.

I don’t blame you
For seizing it in your arms
And cherishing the success
I know you deserve
And maybe that’s it
I don’t deserve it
I don’t even deserve this bed of earth
Within I must now rest.

Rosie Mitchell

fractal007
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 1958

1 posted 2002-12-01 10:02 PM

Oof! This is a very painful and honest poem. I like a writer who isn't afraid to show the true emotions of his/her speakers. This brought tears to my eyes, for some reason. It's definitely going into my library.

"If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"

-- Magus

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

2 posted 2002-12-02 12:13 PM

"If I could I'd apologise and walk away." Wow that really got me. Great poem.

WinterWren
"I want you to believe in life. Will you find out who you are, too late to change?" -Dishwalla-

rm711
Member

since 2002-11-30

Posts 131
Wiltshire, England

3 posted 2002-12-02 04:02 AM

I actually wrote this poem one night and certain things had happened & I wrote it about how I felt towards my brother. I felt like nobody cared about me because I was being ignored & everyone was falling at his feet. But then thats just how it comes, I love my brother more than anyone else & so thats probably why I got so low. Thankyou for your replies

Rosie Mitchell

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

4 posted 2002-12-18 12:22 PM

Beautiful poem. More?

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